Written quickly

'Drinking my last sip
I look over the rim
Of my cup and see you sit'
...It was the best line to begin with, exactly what happens when you look over your rim, you see him or her!

'Imagine in this bar just you and me
Bare naked in front of all to see
Who cares it's about you and me'
...haha, I wouldnt care too, would I? Its all imagination, haha.

'I smell booze and are sex what a lovely
pair'
I dont get this line, is the 'are' suppose to be there?

Everyone watching
... Including the kids? Haha

'Jook box playing hit it baby nice and
slow'
...wana make sure I enjoy to the fullest this poem, do you mind explaining this line?

'Moving and moaning until we explode
Hold the applause next act'
...you are going for another 'act' without rest? With all these scenes, your man would be having the unsteady legs of a recently born foal by now, haha.

You were at it again, even tho you said you wrote this quickly I think you killed it, never sorry for giving you a follow. You make reading so easy! Love this.

Really I was toasted when I wrote this lol...
The line about the sex yes the are belongs there..
Juke box lol Im dyslexic and I was drunk that's a bad mix
I really don't think that's a song btw


Ty for reading.. Your To nice

Sex has a scent

Lovely! lol...I've thought so many times almost those same lines

I think we all have :) glad you liked it

peering through the writers eyes, you can feel the warm libation and it's almost like a dream

A beautiful, wild errant thought is what you describe.  Primal.....I almost feel sorry for the guy you focus these attentions on.  you weave a good story here with minimal dialogue.  And yes, it reads a bit like a lusty lady somewhat "toasted" but that adds a sexiness to it.

A good read : )

Yes it was a drunken thought I just laid it down on here and just went with it..

But sounds good to me I'd def like to experience that lol

Thats the kinda bar I like, lol
(Unless my mums reading this :o)

Great read :o)

O man I think that all the time about my family finding this site I would def hear a lot lol.. Ty for reading

But you can't rush love. This writing is so devoid of emotion, craftless, artless, even the rhyme sounds cheesy, sigh, just obviously written for shock value. I can't believe a lot actually liked it, human species are indeed doomed...

That's fine to each his own.. No harm nor foul.. I don't expect everyone to like what I write so it's ok.. Ty for your honesty I like real and respect you for that

I like it.. you definitely have no problem capturing the moment (: .. no regrets of following you either (:

Ty sweetie that's sweet

So your a freak lol I'm kidding.. Thank you sweetie

Oh I think I do lol ;)

Very good that sounds like the beginning to my next act.. Yours sounds better then mine nice job

Then you've never seen masturbation quiet like mine
Just watching would give you such a rise
Not letting you touch
But calling your name
Id be touching my body in a very naughty way
You'll lick your lips to what I do you'll wish you could join In
But I'll make you watch just sit on the raggedy stool
Be a good boy maybe round two ;)