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The Harder Side of Fuck All.
It's the scum and the shit of the deep underground pit
that comes first and foremost their thirst
of the fuck-end of human decency and intellect.
You try to speak but you're suffocated by the steaming heap
of the scum and the shit of the deep underground pit.
Hip-gangsta' wannabes with their illiterate raps and their poser-pride
Flinging their shit to the side, it continues to fester
the scum and the shit of the deep underground pit.
Fuck your opinions and your blunt force fuck-ended faggotry.
The Scum and the Shit of the Deep Underground Pit
and the harder side of poetry, the softer side of everything else.
We took our leave, but we couldn't fuck it off completely
Nostalgia takes effect, forcefulness helps us comprehend
what the fuck happened to the once great and respected
home of intellectual discussion and hard earned recognition
It's now the Deep Underground Pit of the Scum and the Shit.
Published 4th Jun 2014
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4th Jun 2014 3:11pm
Everything in life is what you make of it, Evan. Instead of always seeing the negative, perhaps you are one to make the changes you desire to see? Every one of us are at different levels of caliber both in life and in writing ability, here at DUP; maybe those at a more experienced level should mentor the up-and-comers and those just beginning, in order to train them up right, so they can hold their own, when someday the baton is passed to them? It's like a unit of soldiers--dissention among the ranks, tears apart, when the soldiers need to work as a team to build up and accomplish their mission.
4th Jun 2014 3:46pm
Amen to that MadameLisa...although I could see that Evan is just venting his frustrations. For those of us at senior level must lead and not fall into the pit of those low level individuals. Respect begets respect and must be earned.
Nice poem by the way...but could be better if you deliver it in a positive way!
Nice poem by the way...but could be better if you deliver it in a positive way!
9th Jun 2014 9:19am
9th Jun 2014 10:03pm
You don't really need to fucking mention it...it's a fucking given! Grow up dude...
10th Jun 2014 7:38am
That's the attitude that's fucked this place through and through. Enjoy the rap battle and illiterate shit. Off to the Pen.
4th Jun 2014 5:22pm
I love a good anger poem (shouldn't this be in that category?) and this one's ripe with skin-shredding scorn. It's really more of a rant than a poem, because it doesn't contain many images or metaphors and the like, but its lines are elegant and it's structured well enough to be enjoyable. It's also smart and sardonic.
2nd Jul 2014 3:31pm
Never sway from who you are, and stand strong for how you feel my man. Nice write! This is your personal feelings spilled on a page, and folks should at least respect that Evan. Rock on!
2nd Jul 2014 5:32pm
Cheers brother, couldn't have said it better. Glad to see somebody here that has a shred of critical thought.
12th Jul 2014 9:36pm
Euan (AscensionES), this is a brilliant poem, venting and sardonic, filled with rhetoric and sarcasm, but it is also stylistically magnificent.
The repetition of lines - I confess, I love it! It is scathing in its rebuke, true, yet artistically, pure treat! And, there is this comment you make about elitism which wholly resonates within me.
You and your talent intrigue me more and more, luv. :-*
The repetition of lines - I confess, I love it! It is scathing in its rebuke, true, yet artistically, pure treat! And, there is this comment you make about elitism which wholly resonates within me.
You and your talent intrigue me more and more, luv. :-*
