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I WANT YOU
I want to dance with you
devour the presence before me
you know what you do to me
look into your eyes
move in closer
and brush you with my breasts
reverse my position
stroke you with my ass
Sway side to side and up and down
place your hands and feel the power of my hips
gyrate to the music
undulate
pulse
vibrate
bounce
Then instantly feel how much you like my moves
oh my!
Run my hands up and down your body as if to size up my meal
become consumed by passion intensifying for you,
I gasp and unleash a hollow moan...ayi papi
I want you
devour the presence before me
you know what you do to me
look into your eyes
move in closer
and brush you with my breasts
reverse my position
stroke you with my ass
Sway side to side and up and down
place your hands and feel the power of my hips
gyrate to the music
undulate
pulse
vibrate
bounce
Then instantly feel how much you like my moves
oh my!
Run my hands up and down your body as if to size up my meal
become consumed by passion intensifying for you,
I gasp and unleash a hollow moan...ayi papi
I want you
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- Edited 5th Jan 2019 8:45pm
1st Jun 2014 5:52am
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2nd Jun 2014 7:39pm
Re: I WANT YOU
1st Jun 2014 9:15am
Shouldn't line 4 read 'Look into MY eyes'?
Robert Frost described dancing as 'The vertical expression of the horizontal desire' - the desire comes out overtly in your poem.
Robert Frost described dancing as 'The vertical expression of the horizontal desire' - the desire comes out overtly in your poem.
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2nd Jun 2014 7:54pm
I thought about what you said regarding line 4....but I would make line 6 sound off....In addition, the poem is about what I want.
Thank you so much Solomon for your wisdom and as always a pleasure to have you visit.
Thank you so much Solomon for your wisdom and as always a pleasure to have you visit.
Re: I WANT YOU
1st Jun 2014 6:47pm
Provocative ink, Ms Lena. Paints a big smile on my face. :)
It has been my intense pleasure to hear these words, "ayi papi" during exchanges of passion. Mmmm, mmm.
It has been my intense pleasure to hear these words, "ayi papi" during exchanges of passion. Mmmm, mmm.
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2nd Jun 2014 7:45pm
I'm glad to have painted a smile on your face giving you pleasant memories....
for a Latin woman, saying those words is intensity and great passion....well done sir ; )
for a Latin woman, saying those words is intensity and great passion....well done sir ; )
Re: I WANT YOU
1st Jun 2014 9:54pm
This is a pretty nice fuckin' poem. You're a damned hot little sex angel, honey. I love it!
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2nd Jun 2014 7:47pm
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2nd Jun 2014 5:18am
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2nd Jun 2014 7:48pm
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2nd Jun 2014 7:51pm
Oh thank you Miss Chiyo!
....coming from a sexy woman like you...you made me blush ; )
....coming from a sexy woman like you...you made me blush ; )
Anonymous
- Edited 16th May 2018 10:05pm
3rd Jun 2014 10:34pm
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Anonymous
11th Jun 2014 3:07pm
Well shit fire! How did I miss this naughty little piece? :)
Lena, I love the edginess of this ink!
"place your hands and feel the power of my hips
gyrate to the music
undulate
pulse
vibrate
bounce" <-- Steamy! Xo
Lena, I love the edginess of this ink!
"place your hands and feel the power of my hips
gyrate to the music
undulate
pulse
vibrate
bounce" <-- Steamy! Xo
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11th Jun 2014 9:13pm
Im learning slowly from you!
Thank you so much Rain
It's always an honor and a pleasure to see you ; )
Thank you so much Rain
It's always an honor and a pleasure to see you ; )
Anonymous
- Edited 16th May 2018 3:44pm
19th Jun 2014 8:10pm
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23rd Jun 2014 4:47pm
Wow! Thank you so much for a wonderful comment Ronnie....what a huge honor coming from you