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Scuffed Wooden Doorway
The evening brings the grey, which eats the amber
flowing from celestial fires. The monochromatic shades
encroach on stray rays of golden optimism,
and sever their entry to the blocked building,
its blinds down.
Through the scuffed wooden doorway
lie the unrested twitches, faltering through their routine,
wretched with threadbare comfort.
The dog-eared calendar deceptively stains its icy fingers
in hair dye.
The air is thick with their mottled memories,
challenged only by sharp slices of the unforgotten.
Pills rattle against brittle bones, staccato sentries
reporting to the doctor's creaking black bag,
in real time.
Unanswered questions are diverted to this address,
although the post office deliveries weigh less
than the collections in the mortician's van.
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- Edited 21st May 2018 7:36pm
18th May 2014 8:19am
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18th May 2014 8:13pm
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18th May 2014 9:55am
Atakti - loved the way this built to its tragic/comic denouement - cool writings indeed
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18th May 2014 8:15pm
Hi there, Whale, good to see you. Yes, I didn't notice the humor... I guess I threw it in subconsciously, as relief. It was getting kinda heavy.
Thank you!
Thank you!
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- Edited 15th May 2018 9:39pm
18th May 2014 9:58am
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19th May 2014 10:02pm
Fascinating,My friend!
Such a mesmerizing 'maze' of mystery--this one...so many twists, and turns, as the reader is taken into the depths of its ( 'darker ) meanings...
It feels as if i have crossed the worn, 'wooden' threshold...and entered the poet's mind...
A bit un-settling, but very intriguing ink!
Such a mesmerizing 'maze' of mystery--this one...so many twists, and turns, as the reader is taken into the depths of its ( 'darker ) meanings...
It feels as if i have crossed the worn, 'wooden' threshold...and entered the poet's mind...
A bit un-settling, but very intriguing ink!
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21st May 2014 3:55am
Unsettling - hell, I unsettled myself! Had a weird dream about hair dye and an elderly person, add to it a sour mood, and this came out. Morbid, and leaving me with a sense of 'Oh God, if I'm ever in a place that dismal, shoot me...'
I guess a bit of the dream painted the atmosphere in this one.
Thank you, Enchantress, for yet more splendid feedback!
I guess a bit of the dream painted the atmosphere in this one.
Thank you, Enchantress, for yet more splendid feedback!
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21st May 2014 6:02pm
You are most welcome!
Wow....and i thought my dreams could be over the edge...(gol)
Wow....and i thought my dreams could be over the edge...(gol)
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- Edited 14th May 2018 10:07pm
22nd May 2014 8:49pm
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- Edited 15th May 2018 7:52pm
28th May 2014 3:36pm
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28th May 2014 6:50pm
Ooh, good catch, miki! I did mean 'sever'. Thanks!
I'm so pleased this caught your eye, thank you for passing by.
:)
I'm so pleased this caught your eye, thank you for passing by.
:)
Re: Scuffed Wooden Doorway
6th Jun 2014 11:20pm
I find this work suiting alongside a dusty piano with the cold espresso of a weekday silence. profound sense impressions leave speechless thoughts
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8th Jun 2014 6:01am