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Krystallnacht
the preliminaries are over. we’ve discussed the latest
best sellers, a trendy art house, a French film that you
had no interest in, but it happened to be chic at the time.
abruptly, the conversation ends.
in the silence, we gaze at each other briefly. our lips touch,
your mouth opens slightly at my urging, our tongues engage
in the lovers combat. as my hand is about to cup your breast,
it is deterred by the small barrier of your own hand, and I
allow you that victory, like a man without a backbone,
without a hunger.
are we afraid? fearful of being taken before a tribunal
of unblemished hearts, stripped and lashed,
for unlawful carnal knowledge…
we are prisoners of love in separate cells. the eyes in the walls
watch us, blinking codes to each other that only they understand.
the elders who rule would judge our simple affection as the crime
of uninhibited souls. the thought police would arrive and break
down the door, and soon after we would be nothing more than
rebellious memories…
in the heaven of a million stars, is there one star that
would afford us a haven, a blissful refuge?
do you know that star?
can you guide me there?
Published 15th May 2014
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- Edited 21st May 2018 7:36pm
15th May 2014 7:46am
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15th May 2014 9:10am
we are prisoners of love in separate cells. the eyes in the walls
watch us, blinking codes to each other that only they understand!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! #nods
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15th May 2014 12:48pm
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15th May 2014 2:43pm
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15th May 2014 3:27pm
16th May 2014 1:47am
"as my hand is about to cup your breast,
it is deterred by the small barrier of your own hand, and I allow you that victory, like a man without a backbone, without a hunger."
- amazing work my friend
it is deterred by the small barrier of your own hand, and I allow you that victory, like a man without a backbone, without a hunger."
- amazing work my friend
17th May 2014 4:54am
Elegant frame around that moment, that sweet moment just before the boat slips its moorings - will it?
Searching questions on something simple and still, the dance steps are so complicated.
Searching questions on something simple and still, the dance steps are so complicated.
18th May 2014 10:09am
Hey JF - the seemingly romantic title conceals the horrors of the night and reminds that even the simplest romance dies before fear
19th May 2014 2:15pm
Totally fascinated by this captivating and eloquently carved poem, John. You found so wonderful words to bring us the carnal and emotional depths near. Love it.
23rd May 2014 12:43pm
excellent. I would cut the stanza with the questions. the one that starts with "are we afraid?" sounds too much like an explanation. It is unnecessary and detracts from the rest of the piece.
I really enjoyed this one. as a whole it is beautiful.
I really enjoyed this one. as a whole it is beautiful.
