trouble when it moves

I always appreciate you're feedback bc I know - you know where I'm coming from

Did you copy somebody else' lyrics?

^^^^um as an follower of Pedro's work, I can honestly say 'No', nothing this man inks is plagiarized; if that's what you were implying, if not, my apologies. This poem as he stated at the beginning was entered in competition where he had to write about a quote given or in his case, song lyrics given, which happened to be, eminem.

To answer in the short form: NO!

The challenge behind the posted competition was the host would provide lyrics or a quote when a poet indicated their interest in writing for the competition.

My "assignment" was to play off Marshall Mathers aka Eminem ... While I did maintain the general theme of the song (drug addiction) ... my twist was to talk about the lies addicts tell to maintain relationships ... Eminem focused more on an overdose ...

I'm sure the host will do her due diligence via Google to make sure my work is ... MINE!.  ... And I trust you'll do the same in the future before throwing out the plagiarism (copy) tag out ...

In fact I could lead you to some of my other work on DUP so you can understand my background for writing the piece ...

Welcome to DUP! ... And thanks for the read.

This was awesome luv, Good luck with the comp...Xo

Thanks for the read and the commentary my poetic sister ... Good to know you're lookin' out

xoxo

I love the imagery and the use of the quote. I can feel the emotions that are woven in to your words.
However, there might be a missing word, "My body merely a tenant..."
I'm not sure if it's intentional or not. If it was then you could consider having "my body" on a different line to make it seem more intentional.

I looked at your comment a few times and the wording ... I was trying to convey that the protagonist felt himself a prisoner to his own mind ...  
 
I'll edit if needed with fresh eyes ... There's still time before the comp ...  
 
Thanks for the honest feedback  
 
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It took me a minute but I see what you mean ... Inserted a comma after "my body," to give it a pause OR do you think does "my body is merelywork betters better?

Great sign off and imagery - ambivalence pervades - cool writings Big Dog

I always appreciate your kind words and time reviewing my work ... Much appreciated

My Friend,

This piece offers an extraordinary expression of emotion! The creative, vivid imagery, of your lines, has seeped into my pores....crawling in between my skin and bones.......

lingering within in my memory---long after i finish each and every reading.

My very best to you inn the comp!

Sla'inte!!! xo

Dear Enchantress ... I'm humbled and honored you've added this piece to your RL ... and it spoke to you on such a deep level ... No matter the outcome of the comp - your commentary has made writing this worthwhile

Salud

Nice piece! Good luck.

Thanks for the read and comp well wishes.

where we go, trouble follows. very slick verses...

... follows yes - bigger problem yet is when I chase it

Thank you for the commentary John ... Always deeply appreciated

Well, this one gets my vote.

(I finally got my quote from comp host, but the muse wasn't playing that day.)

I see the painting in your strokes. Well-executed, Lobo, an inspired work.

Note - those of us who know you would never doubt the authenticity of your work. Ink on, Poet.

Thanks for your read and feedback; and I appreciate the vote.

If I gotta steal my on stuff that means I'm a piss poor poet and worse thief ... Guess I'm bound for hell (just hope someone saves me a slot on DUP open mike night)

really good work.  heart wrenching and real.  really real.  ha.

Thanks for the read and feedback ... it didn't fare well in the competition but I'm really proud of it ... An ode to family & friends who fell victim to the heroin plague of the '70s