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Cuffs and Cum
Strait on I'm coming for you with no chance to get away.
I feel your every heartbeat, your every movement
I'm in your R.E.M I own you, it's pure bliss
I am your worst nightmare and yet
I am your savior,
your calm, your emotions
your renaissance...
Click click the cuffs are locked
and the sound of my insane desire
is almost impish.
Hands above your head
against the wall
pants down
suffocating
rhythm grinding
panties soaked
pussy throbbing
blood racing as I sniff
caress and drink in your rugged voice.
Pressing up against you provocatively
seduction is blinding me.
I grab hold of your luscious curve
and place my lips on your beautiful skin,
It's pure erotica unrated,
I swallow you whole!
And YES,
I FUCKING LOVE IT THIS WAY!
I look up just enough to see
your wicked eyes bearing down on me,
willing your cock to caress my greedy mouth.
I beg for more and can't wait for it,
you oblige
and fuck my skull deep
until you slide into place completely.
Rocking in and out
While The Diary of Jane
is buzzing in your ears
guiding your rhythmic dance
down my fucking throat you pig!
you dirty nasty spanish boy!
I laugh with my vixen eyes
as I lock into yours,
sharp and total dominance over
you I rayne.
you collapse,
it's real.
A sinister grin traces my lips,
I push you down
you begin your feast!
I am the most raunchiest,
fully loaded Queen,
AND I AM FUCKING FEARLESS!
"suck that dick"
I tell him
as I ride his face
as if I were a man
with a huge dick.
Up and down
I push his head by his hair
like a haggard rag doll!
He guzzles my milk while telling me
how sweet it tastes!
I'M FUCKING DONE!
Like Medusa in a paradox
or the shock of a Life Sentence
I become catatonic,
his writhing face
fucking my cunt,
It responds in seizure like jolts
he flicked the switch
I am his
unconditionally!
I feel your every heartbeat, your every movement
I'm in your R.E.M I own you, it's pure bliss
I am your worst nightmare and yet
I am your savior,
your calm, your emotions
your renaissance...
Click click the cuffs are locked
and the sound of my insane desire
is almost impish.
Hands above your head
against the wall
pants down
suffocating
rhythm grinding
panties soaked
pussy throbbing
blood racing as I sniff
caress and drink in your rugged voice.
Pressing up against you provocatively
seduction is blinding me.
I grab hold of your luscious curve
and place my lips on your beautiful skin,
It's pure erotica unrated,
I swallow you whole!
And YES,
I FUCKING LOVE IT THIS WAY!
I look up just enough to see
your wicked eyes bearing down on me,
willing your cock to caress my greedy mouth.
I beg for more and can't wait for it,
you oblige
and fuck my skull deep
until you slide into place completely.
Rocking in and out
While The Diary of Jane
is buzzing in your ears
guiding your rhythmic dance
down my fucking throat you pig!
you dirty nasty spanish boy!
I laugh with my vixen eyes
as I lock into yours,
sharp and total dominance over
you I rayne.
you collapse,
it's real.
A sinister grin traces my lips,
I push you down
you begin your feast!
I am the most raunchiest,
fully loaded Queen,
AND I AM FUCKING FEARLESS!
"suck that dick"
I tell him
as I ride his face
as if I were a man
with a huge dick.
Up and down
I push his head by his hair
like a haggard rag doll!
He guzzles my milk while telling me
how sweet it tastes!
I'M FUCKING DONE!
Like Medusa in a paradox
or the shock of a Life Sentence
I become catatonic,
his writhing face
fucking my cunt,
It responds in seizure like jolts
he flicked the switch
I am his
unconditionally!
Published 1st May 2014
| Edited 19th Jun 2014
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1st May 2014 6:26am
wow a very erotic piece Zazzles...well done!!!!
You seem to amaze me with your written talent....Good stuff
<3 Jess <3
You seem to amaze me with your written talent....Good stuff
<3 Jess <3
1st May 2014 7:02am
what a dirty girl you are, I saw it comin' right from the title!
cool, I like my sex raw...
cool, I like my sex raw...
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1st May 2014 6:17pm
...you wild little whore, you... :)I wanna' be just like 'you' when I grow up. ;)
NEver read naughty and raw ink from you lady....
different and a wonderfully entertaining read. I was sitting in the corner, in the dark, watching.... Xo
NEver read naughty and raw ink from you lady....
different and a wonderfully entertaining read. I was sitting in the corner, in the dark, watching.... Xo
1st May 2014 6:23pm
Zazzles, this is great! As everyone has already said, it's raw and exciting, writihing with the ironic dominant submissive stance.
Since you signed up for the honest critique, I'll give you the bad with the good (although you make it a little hard because this poem really is quite good)...
Spelling/Grammar issues:
wicket = wicked?
how sweet it taste = either "how sweet I taste" or "how sweet it tastes"
rayne = reign (although I actually **really** liked this mis-spelling and almost wonder if you could place a couple of other mispellings in your work where i's are replaced by y's....it might have an interesting old-world effect. If not in this poem, perhaps in another?)
You had several places where I felt a comma would be appropriate, but given that poetry is all about artistic license, and there were no glaring awkward spots, I won't point them out individually, I'll just encourage you to re-read this poem a few times and work out where the commas go in your head.
Suggestions:
Try replacing "sometimes I feel as though" with "I am" or "I could be" and see what you think. See the following comment...
In most cases of the words "probably", "almost", "sometimes" etc... the words weaken your meaning, as is the case with "almost impish." I would suggest just deleting "almost".
I didn't exactly understand what you meant about medusa or the life sentence, but, nevertheless, that part is good because it still lends itself to a powerful, somewhat harsh vision that is consistent with the rest of the poem and it carries the piece even though it seems so abstract.
Overall, great job!
I'm brand new to this forum but it seems that you are a very prolific poet and I was curious how 'into' erotica you are and how much you can stomach (or enjoy!) when it comes to taboos. If you have a stomach of steel (or, like me, a completely overactive, erotic imagination), would you be willing to tear apart my poem that I just posted? It's a trainwreck in parts but I think it has a lot of potential and no one has critiqued it yet. (Absolutely no obligation, I know its subject matter is far from most people's cup of tea.) IF you're up for it, please check it out and give me your very honest feedback.
Again, great job on this poem, it was a pleasure to read.
Since you signed up for the honest critique, I'll give you the bad with the good (although you make it a little hard because this poem really is quite good)...
Spelling/Grammar issues:
wicket = wicked?
how sweet it taste = either "how sweet I taste" or "how sweet it tastes"
rayne = reign (although I actually **really** liked this mis-spelling and almost wonder if you could place a couple of other mispellings in your work where i's are replaced by y's....it might have an interesting old-world effect. If not in this poem, perhaps in another?)
You had several places where I felt a comma would be appropriate, but given that poetry is all about artistic license, and there were no glaring awkward spots, I won't point them out individually, I'll just encourage you to re-read this poem a few times and work out where the commas go in your head.
Suggestions:
Try replacing "sometimes I feel as though" with "I am" or "I could be" and see what you think. See the following comment...
In most cases of the words "probably", "almost", "sometimes" etc... the words weaken your meaning, as is the case with "almost impish." I would suggest just deleting "almost".
I didn't exactly understand what you meant about medusa or the life sentence, but, nevertheless, that part is good because it still lends itself to a powerful, somewhat harsh vision that is consistent with the rest of the poem and it carries the piece even though it seems so abstract.
Overall, great job!
I'm brand new to this forum but it seems that you are a very prolific poet and I was curious how 'into' erotica you are and how much you can stomach (or enjoy!) when it comes to taboos. If you have a stomach of steel (or, like me, a completely overactive, erotic imagination), would you be willing to tear apart my poem that I just posted? It's a trainwreck in parts but I think it has a lot of potential and no one has critiqued it yet. (Absolutely no obligation, I know its subject matter is far from most people's cup of tea.) IF you're up for it, please check it out and give me your very honest feedback.
Again, great job on this poem, it was a pleasure to read.
2nd May 2014 2:35am
I know what you mean about commas, it can be hard to find a balance in poetry when it comes to comma usage.
As for your poem and enjoying the submissive role, that suggests to me you might enjoy the nature of my poem. To let on some minor spoilers, my poem includes elements of fantasy (elves, dragons...), conquest and submission of the female character, bondage, and dragon sex (beastiality). If you like those, give it a go and see what you think!
As for your poem and enjoying the submissive role, that suggests to me you might enjoy the nature of my poem. To let on some minor spoilers, my poem includes elements of fantasy (elves, dragons...), conquest and submission of the female character, bondage, and dragon sex (beastiality). If you like those, give it a go and see what you think!
Sarziah and the Dragon:
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/160230-sarziah-and-the-dragon/
(Or click the link under my username and 'picture,' then click the poem
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/160230-sarziah-and-the-dragon/
(Or click the link under my username and 'picture,' then click the poem
1st May 2014 7:13pm
Raw, rough, gripping, hardcore and vivid, just my kind of poem, keep inking it is good stuff
2nd May 2014 1:20am
ZAZZ that was fuckin' HOT!!!!!
Great write Hot stuff!!
Loving the pen you write with!!!
Awesome read sweets!!
Sir Lancelott
Great write Hot stuff!!
Loving the pen you write with!!!
Awesome read sweets!!
Sir Lancelott
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2nd May 2014 7:54am
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2nd May 2014 8:15am
8th Jun 2014 7:58pm
I have just joined this forum and I find your writing to be very intriguing. You write sexy smart and take your reader for the full ride. I especially enjoy your play with dominance. "I fucking love it this way."
Anonymous
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19th Jun 2014 3:33am
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19th Jun 2014 8:02am
2nd Jul 2014 5:01am
Wow o: omg that was AMAZING O: you are such a good writer and that was fucking awesome and hot as hell , i loved it xD
