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Flywheels and Pixie dust
and he cursed the damned awakening
because he could almost hear
the orchestra of bone clad cogs
starting to turn themselves
tooth by tooth
and knew too that before long
they'd be spinning fluent
constantly whirring
then begged
for god's honest truth
to hide itself
deep down inside his guts
so his head couldn't wrap a cloak around it
and smother it's life
clean gone
for some quasi swan song
that would feed it full to the brain
in times where reaching in
is all that was needed
to bring a craving back from the grave
because he could almost hear
the orchestra of bone clad cogs
starting to turn themselves
tooth by tooth
and knew too that before long
they'd be spinning fluent
constantly whirring
then begged
for god's honest truth
to hide itself
deep down inside his guts
so his head couldn't wrap a cloak around it
and smother it's life
clean gone
for some quasi swan song
that would feed it full to the brain
in times where reaching in
is all that was needed
to bring a craving back from the grave
Written by
lepperochan
(CraicDealer)
Published 30th Apr 2014
| Edited 2nd May 2014
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Anonymous
- Edited 16th Sep 2020 7:37pm
30th Apr 2014 4:08pm
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re: Re: Flywheels and Pixie dust
2nd May 2014 6:36pm
Cheers Missus
(having tech difficulties replying to comments)
I've sorted those edits you suggested and agree that it reads better, thanks for that
yeah introspection, I was half leaning towards posting this under self, but for all the about me that makes up the poem, it's not s'posed to be about me at all ...if that makes any sense
cheers for the title nod, kinda like it myself which is rare enough
thanks for the drop by and leaving your thoughts
(having tech difficulties replying to comments)
I've sorted those edits you suggested and agree that it reads better, thanks for that
yeah introspection, I was half leaning towards posting this under self, but for all the about me that makes up the poem, it's not s'posed to be about me at all ...if that makes any sense
cheers for the title nod, kinda like it myself which is rare enough
thanks for the drop by and leaving your thoughts
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 7:52pm
30th Apr 2014 7:35pm
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re: Re: Flywheels and Pixie dust
2nd May 2014 6:25pm
Missus Moon
thank you kindly dear lady, nice to have given you powerful thoughts
appreciate the drop-by and words, Miss
thank you kindly dear lady, nice to have given you powerful thoughts
appreciate the drop-by and words, Miss
Re: Flywheels and Pixie dust
1st May 2014 3:03am
Bone clad clogs starting to turn themselves tooth by tooth.
That and the last two stanzas really did it for me.
Took me a few reads before I got it (I think I did anyway)
Definitely in the right category, when in doubt just stick it in the love category. Everything boils down to love if you twist right, man. Good write mate, just the right amount if vague to keep it open, with a few key details to mark it as yours.
That and the last two stanzas really did it for me.
Took me a few reads before I got it (I think I did anyway)
Definitely in the right category, when in doubt just stick it in the love category. Everything boils down to love if you twist right, man. Good write mate, just the right amount if vague to keep it open, with a few key details to mark it as yours.
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re: Re: Flywheels and Pixie dust
2nd May 2014 6:29pm
Melody man
cheers man, always a pleasure to read your take. I think you're right 'bout the genre. mostly when I'm in doubt I'll lean towards observational or misc
seems you know my mind, which is kinda cool. thanks for that, and for your continued support and encouragement
cheers man, always a pleasure to read your take. I think you're right 'bout the genre. mostly when I'm in doubt I'll lean towards observational or misc
seems you know my mind, which is kinda cool. thanks for that, and for your continued support and encouragement
Re: Flywheels and Pixie dust
1st May 2014 6:05am
Ahhhh....Mo Chara,
Such outstanding originality of expression!
This piece pulls the reader directly into the depths of the poet's very soul....
and into the midst of the whirring wheels, and the fragile complexities that love brings--or perhaps the internal struggle, to come to terms, with a love, that if fully confessed, might surely mean its demise.
To me, your third stanza expresses such a powerful message...risking loss through the acknowledgment of the actual emotion.
Such Intricate, Intriguing Ink !
Such outstanding originality of expression!
This piece pulls the reader directly into the depths of the poet's very soul....
and into the midst of the whirring wheels, and the fragile complexities that love brings--or perhaps the internal struggle, to come to terms, with a love, that if fully confessed, might surely mean its demise.
To me, your third stanza expresses such a powerful message...risking loss through the acknowledgment of the actual emotion.
Such Intricate, Intriguing Ink !
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re: Re: Flywheels and Pixie dust
1st May 2014 3:37pm
Enchanted one, mó chára. Gó raíbh máith agút bean ailean
I gave a brief look into my soul, my gut and my head. When something awakes inside to start the process of turning the bone clad clogs, slow first, Each time tooth kisses tooth a feeling gets kick started, it's a slow process until as you mentioned the wheels start whirring, if you don't mind I may use wheels whirring in an edit :) the gut is where it must hide because the head will surly kill it off ..it's a pro at that
ah, you've covered all your bases there anyway, fair play and thank you most kindly cor dropping by and leaving your thoughts
I gave a brief look into my soul, my gut and my head. When something awakes inside to start the process of turning the bone clad clogs, slow first, Each time tooth kisses tooth a feeling gets kick started, it's a slow process until as you mentioned the wheels start whirring, if you don't mind I may use wheels whirring in an edit :) the gut is where it must hide because the head will surly kill it off ..it's a pro at that
ah, you've covered all your bases there anyway, fair play and thank you most kindly cor dropping by and leaving your thoughts
re: re: Re: Flywheels and Pixie dust
1st May 2014 4:21pm
Of course i don't mind.....would be honored if should decide to use my description.
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Re: Flywheels and Pixie dust
2nd May 2014 9:17am
Getting here after the other comments there's little add as it now has all it's wheels on and is a beautiful little machine spinning a tale of the comfort in apathy and the fear as the balance of inertia calls u on and demands the doing of what you're here for - step forth Lepp
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re: Re: Flywheels and Pixie dust
2nd May 2014 6:33pm
Whale, you fly Yardie
I dunno man, I'm reading this one fairly regular, I've the feeling that I've left some things out, don't want to desecrate what's there already but certainly I think there's more to be said here, a work in progress I s'pose
thank you much for dropping by and leaving your thoughts, much appreciated my good man
I dunno man, I'm reading this one fairly regular, I've the feeling that I've left some things out, don't want to desecrate what's there already but certainly I think there's more to be said here, a work in progress I s'pose
thank you much for dropping by and leaving your thoughts, much appreciated my good man
Re: Flywheels and Pixie dust
9th Jul 2014 3:30pm
re: Re: Flywheels and Pixie dust
26th Aug 2014 2:30pm
Guardian Demon
sorry ’bout the delay, good fellow. you’re far too kind, in a good way.
cheers for the drop by and the words
sorry ’bout the delay, good fellow. you’re far too kind, in a good way.
cheers for the drop by and the words
Re: Flywheels and Pixie dust
26th Aug 2014 6:37am
Very well written. I could see where you would think you may have left things out, but in all reality it is hard to write down all that an awakening is-though you did a good job. Read and re-read this one. Keeps my mind spinning. You are very talented and that is putting it mildly. Write on.
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re: Re: Flywheels and Pixie dust
26th Aug 2014 2:35pm
Nevergiveup
first off, the curse of the pox be on you for putting that god awful Rick Astley song in my head.
welcome to my humble scribe cave, Mis and thank you for reading, re reading and laying down your thoughts. much appreciated
first off, the curse of the pox be on you for putting that god awful Rick Astley song in my head.
welcome to my humble scribe cave, Mis and thank you for reading, re reading and laying down your thoughts. much appreciated