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when?
When did you stop
being special to me?
When did your eyes
not make me fall in love with you anymore?
When did your body stop
making me lust after you?
When did your voice
start to sound annoying?
When did your touch
start to feel cold?
When did your hair
not fly in the air anymore?
That one moment,
when everything stopped working
between us two.
That one night,
when we grew tired of each other
without realizing it. When?
being special to me?
When did your eyes
not make me fall in love with you anymore?
When did your body stop
making me lust after you?
When did your voice
start to sound annoying?
When did your touch
start to feel cold?
When did your hair
not fly in the air anymore?
That one moment,
when everything stopped working
between us two.
That one night,
when we grew tired of each other
without realizing it. When?
Published 28th Apr 2014
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28th Apr 2014 7:22pm
It's a nice poem. Just one thing sort of confused me on it. The line "When stopped your body to make me lust after you?" I figure it should say "When did your body stop making me lust after you?"
28th Apr 2014 8:20pm
Thanks for commenting!
And thanks for pointing out what made you stumble. Yours sounds better. Thanks!
gorry
And thanks for pointing out what made you stumble. Yours sounds better. Thanks!
gorry
28th Apr 2014 10:48pm
29th Apr 2014 6:16pm