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you're such a poet
if you make love in the moonlight
you have only made love in the moonlight
you have not written the great romance novel
you have not composed the poem that would
shame the sonnets of Shakespeare
or painted your dreams across the sky dome of
the Sistine, in the faces of gods & angels
you have not transported the vessel of your
travesties to a utopian fantasy adorned with
oloroso rivers, Dali wildflowers & winged unicorns
you are still here
in the place where you made love
if you make love in the moonlight
I won’t look to the sky for a blazing star
that will lead me to the manger of a remarkable idea
I won’t expect the bountiful harvest that will feed all
the hungry children in the border towns of Purgatory
or the magic potion that will heal the sick, penitents of Lourdes
…I will wonder why
it isn’t with me
if you make love in the moonlight
Published 23rd Apr 2014
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23rd Apr 2014 10:05am
magnificent piece! ... It's a wonderful contrast between the reality of the moment versus what the protagonist desires most
23rd Apr 2014 10:19am
I really enjoyed this...such vivid description alluding to desire! Keep it up.
23rd Apr 2014 10:38am
you're right, of course, it's
easy to get carried away by
the moment when, in the
cold light of day, all you're
left with is a nettle rash..:)
oh but I can relate, who
couldn't, with the sad
ending..
easy to get carried away by
the moment when, in the
cold light of day, all you're
left with is a nettle rash..:)
oh but I can relate, who
couldn't, with the sad
ending..
23rd Apr 2014 11:07am
Ha, ha, ha! Definitely a guy-thing! It's the selfish beast that breathes in us all! Enjoyed this very much.
23rd Apr 2014 11:26am
this is beautiful view..seldom who would see it like that..yet write the ode..thank you
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23rd Apr 2014 11:37am
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23rd Apr 2014 11:47am
Anonymous
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23rd Apr 2014 4:22pm
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23rd Apr 2014 6:42pm
Opulent write, John, with a brilliant balance between insobriety and disillusion. Your style is enchanting.
Anonymous
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23rd Apr 2014 8:50pm
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24th Apr 2014 2:05am
when you speak the universe stops to listen, listen with the most keen of ears and with the most wanton of heart. Exquisite penning:)
25th Apr 2014 1:23am
Anonymous
26th Apr 2014 3:00am
"or painted your dreams across the sky dome of
the Sistine, in the faces of gods & angels
you have not transported the vessel of your
travesties to a utopian fantasy adorned with
oloroso rivers, Dali wildflowers & winged unicorns"<--so amazing!
You're Amazing! Xo
the Sistine, in the faces of gods & angels
you have not transported the vessel of your
travesties to a utopian fantasy adorned with
oloroso rivers, Dali wildflowers & winged unicorns"<--so amazing!
You're Amazing! Xo
Anonymous
- Edited 23rd Oct 2019 7:38am
9th Jul 2014 1:39am
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