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must everyday crave for
godlike godless wave
smack, like like a like a
whipcrack at me back
risk to drown for a
near eternal oceansea
reflecting refracturing
a billion+ unknowable universes
univeralites that make hu'man
self-mind whine & pray for all
to be so sure as 'his own' godlikeness.
that said, let it be said that:
an overdose[of]placebo all ways
has been
our
only hope for the hopelessness of
the overblow'd self,
in it's own right,
left t'languish in
it's own limpid
(de)light,
like rite now, wit MarioLanza singin(Temptation, noless)
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godlike godless wave
smack, like like a like a
whipcrack at me back
risk to drown for a
near eternal oceansea
reflecting refracturing
a billion+ unknowable universes
univeralites that make hu'man
self-mind whine & pray for all
to be so sure as 'his own' godlikeness.
that said, let it be said that:
an overdose[of]placebo all ways
has been
our
only hope for the hopelessness of
the overblow'd self,
in it's own right,
left t'languish in
it's own limpid
(de)light,
like rite now, wit MarioLanza singin(Temptation, noless)
__________________________________________________
dkzk'scosmicomickingdomofklunk2014xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Published 13th Apr 2014
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13th Apr 2014 2:39pm
Ahaha, this is funny, overdose of placebo, eh? And what are those Macedonian what? Well your boobs are much better than mine, you know ...
13th Apr 2014 3:43pm
Halva --- a middle-eastern sweet confection made of pulverized sesame & tons of sugar......
yeah, like 'my' boobs = best boobs.......Mama often referred to me as:
A Real Boob
13th Apr 2014 3:08pm
Danny bhoy
good stuff here as per, not 100% sure of the opening line, ..well this part: " like like a like a whipcrack at me back" perhaps a syllable too much, that said on re read it does hold a nice quirkyness
it's a grand ol' write, right enough and as always a pleasure to read
(sorry Dan, I find myself outta depth to make suggestions or offer anything constructive)
godd stuff man, shine on
good stuff here as per, not 100% sure of the opening line, ..well this part: " like like a like a whipcrack at me back" perhaps a syllable too much, that said on re read it does hold a nice quirkyness
it's a grand ol' write, right enough and as always a pleasure to read
(sorry Dan, I find myself outta depth to make suggestions or offer anything constructive)
godd stuff man, shine on
13th Apr 2014 3:57pm
thank you,CD.......
I'm not sure of any of the lines, as i cannot rite wit'out giving blind trust unto my spontaneous, unconscious disconsciousness, & leave it at that, as per sink-or-swim wit no contrivance to make it float.......
yes, i do have this nagging compulsion to absurdly overstate any simile/metaphor items that pop into me mindhead wit idiotic overstatement, whilst trying to avoid simile/metaphor traps common jackass po'ets like myself.
somekinda neurological damage or anomaly prevents me from being 'serious' about MY poetry,music,pixtr-creation, My Art-as-Life (even tho Art is MY life...i canno live-it wit'out ridiculing self for all the self-seriousness that me feller humanbeans suffer upon theySelfs.....
jeez, what is this oldfool talkin'bout? Hopeless!!
bless ye, sir....i'preciate seein yr moniker on my stuff
I'm not sure of any of the lines, as i cannot rite wit'out giving blind trust unto my spontaneous, unconscious disconsciousness, & leave it at that, as per sink-or-swim wit no contrivance to make it float.......
yes, i do have this nagging compulsion to absurdly overstate any simile/metaphor items that pop into me mindhead wit idiotic overstatement, whilst trying to avoid simile/metaphor traps common jackass po'ets like myself.
somekinda neurological damage or anomaly prevents me from being 'serious' about MY poetry,music,pixtr-creation, My Art-as-Life (even tho Art is MY life...i canno live-it wit'out ridiculing self for all the self-seriousness that me feller humanbeans suffer upon theySelfs.....
jeez, what is this oldfool talkin'bout? Hopeless!!
bless ye, sir....i'preciate seein yr moniker on my stuff
13th Apr 2014 10:48pm
it's the spontaneous element I've
always really liked, perhaps I should
have mentioned this before as it was clearly
the element in the room...
always really liked, perhaps I should
have mentioned this before as it was clearly
the element in the room...
