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Thinking Out Loud
When the world grows dark
I lie my head down
knowing it's light
where you are
I wonder, do you think of me
when it rains where I am
and the waves rush the shore
the shifting sand browns
yours white with fallen snow
do you think of me
when the roofs of your home
grow colourful with autumn
falling leaves
and mine is just always green
do you think of me
when blooms nod their sleepy heads
on your lush gardens
and the orchids nod
in the heat of May
do you think of me
do you think of me
when you watch
the sunsets in your sky
in the sunrise of my day
just for a minute
will you remember me
when the day comes
to an end
and eternal sleep beckons
will you?
I lie my head down
knowing it's light
where you are
I wonder, do you think of me
when it rains where I am
and the waves rush the shore
the shifting sand browns
yours white with fallen snow
do you think of me
when the roofs of your home
grow colourful with autumn
falling leaves
and mine is just always green
do you think of me
when blooms nod their sleepy heads
on your lush gardens
and the orchids nod
in the heat of May
do you think of me
do you think of me
when you watch
the sunsets in your sky
in the sunrise of my day
just for a minute
will you remember me
when the day comes
to an end
and eternal sleep beckons
will you?
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22nd Mar 2014 5:59pm
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23rd Mar 2014 1:04am
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23rd Mar 2014 2:13pm
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re: Re: Thinking Out Loud
23rd Mar 2014 1:06am
Thanks so much sw9618, Wow, yes a better impact I think. I didnt think of that. Reference for future. I will leave this as it is.
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Re: Thinking Out Loud
22nd Mar 2014 9:40pm
Is this the opposite of a lover speaking to a love who has moved on to paradise?
The one awaiting in paradise speaking to the loved one who still lives in the confines of time.
enjoyed the beauty of distant Love,
Guessing Out Loud R.T.
The one awaiting in paradise speaking to the loved one who still lives in the confines of time.
enjoyed the beauty of distant Love,
Guessing Out Loud R.T.
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re: Re: Thinking Out Loud
23rd Mar 2014 1:08am
It can be that too, R.T.:) I am so glad you see it like that. Mine was quite simple really, just a person in the tropics thinking about another in the temperate land. Thanks for reading and commenting...so kind of you.
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Re: Thinking Out Loud
23rd Mar 2014 4:44am
Great form and beautifully written.I wouldn't change nothing.Thank you for the read!
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23rd Mar 2014 4:50am
Hi Pleasure, thank you so much for dropping by and commenting. such Kind words!:)
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24th Mar 2014 11:19am
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