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The summer came and went
your money left unspent
the industry makes you pay dollars for half-wits' two cents
some spread their word like a prophet
some in it for the profit
Treat em like a faucet
Turn it on for a sonnet
turn it off when they've lost it
change the topic.
partially functional
half of me aint comfortable
the other half is feelin fantastically wonderful
rid the world of the useless
money-grubbin, plastic loving, oil-hugging
fucking dudes that
exploit the soil that the people toil in
the people ain't like money trees
they like money weeds
lets be like aspen trees
from one to many, record setting
size. lets be wise, guys
love one another
don't turn your back on your brother
your money left unspent
the industry makes you pay dollars for half-wits' two cents
some spread their word like a prophet
some in it for the profit
Treat em like a faucet
Turn it on for a sonnet
turn it off when they've lost it
change the topic.
partially functional
half of me aint comfortable
the other half is feelin fantastically wonderful
rid the world of the useless
money-grubbin, plastic loving, oil-hugging
fucking dudes that
exploit the soil that the people toil in
the people ain't like money trees
they like money weeds
lets be like aspen trees
from one to many, record setting
size. lets be wise, guys
love one another
don't turn your back on your brother
Published 20th Mar 2014
| Edited 23rd Mar 2014
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20th Mar 2014 6:34pm
You play the fence, your flow is weak and your concepts suck
It makes no sense, so to speak – your logic's fucked
You're not alone, this world aflock with clones.
Beware the garden gnomes.
It makes no sense, so to speak – your logic's fucked
You're not alone, this world aflock with clones.
Beware the garden gnomes.
How about you be constructive with your comments you fuck Jakki?
Real fuckin orginial, rhyming fuck with suck, why you tryna attack me?
Your flow is much more weak, do you think before you speak?
Explain what you don't get,
but you rap with nonsense instead
You think you bring the danger
but you're a fucking hater.
please, do explain.
you think that you're spot on
but really you're just too vague
Real fuckin orginial, rhyming fuck with suck, why you tryna attack me?
Your flow is much more weak, do you think before you speak?
Explain what you don't get,
but you rap with nonsense instead
You think you bring the danger
but you're a fucking hater.
please, do explain.
you think that you're spot on
but really you're just too vague
22nd Mar 2014 5:31pm
That's pathetic. You rhyme about the industry, which you're not a part of. You rhyme about money you don't have. You rhyme about random, unitelligable shit, you can't keep a syllabic count of constant flow and you don't even know what I mean when I say you play the fence. Step out of the rap game kid.