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Wretched
Your mica eyes
Thrust their sinister gaze--
Grim and glowering--
Gouging into gaping heart-wounds
To commence continuous fresh ooze,
Dripping from festering unhealed cores.
Your darkened desires
Derive insidious pleasures...
You watch the writhing and wasting--
The squirming of my weakening spirit,
Gazing at the gruesome handi-work
Of your impaled butterfly.
The brilliant brevity
Of my soul's prismatic patterns,
Exsanguinates in frantic futile beatings
With shredded ineffectual wings.
Faint flutterings fade
Within toxic memories,
And anguish appeases from silent screams
To inevitable numbing...
(Release me--
p l e a s e--
I need to soar.)
Thrust their sinister gaze--
Grim and glowering--
Gouging into gaping heart-wounds
To commence continuous fresh ooze,
Dripping from festering unhealed cores.
Your darkened desires
Derive insidious pleasures...
You watch the writhing and wasting--
The squirming of my weakening spirit,
Gazing at the gruesome handi-work
Of your impaled butterfly.
The brilliant brevity
Of my soul's prismatic patterns,
Exsanguinates in frantic futile beatings
With shredded ineffectual wings.
Faint flutterings fade
Within toxic memories,
And anguish appeases from silent screams
To inevitable numbing...
(Release me--
p l e a s e--
I need to soar.)
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Re: Wretched
9th Mar 2014 6:21pm
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Thank you, my friend!
Pain is only relevant when it continues to cause overwhelming discomfort. The soul cannot truly exist unless one is allowed an escape...
Your comments are sincerely appreciated--especially at this time--'wreally, wreally.' :)
Pain is only relevant when it continues to cause overwhelming discomfort. The soul cannot truly exist unless one is allowed an escape...
Your comments are sincerely appreciated--especially at this time--'wreally, wreally.' :)
Re: Wretched
Anonymous
9th Mar 2014 6:38pm
Dang! Can dark ink be more beautiful?
"The brilliant brevity
Of my soul's prismatic patterns,
Exsanguinates in frantic futile beatings
With shredded ineffectual wings"<-- my eyes had a WOW Moment.
If I haven't told you lately, you are Amazing! Xo
"The brilliant brevity
Of my soul's prismatic patterns,
Exsanguinates in frantic futile beatings
With shredded ineffectual wings"<-- my eyes had a WOW Moment.
If I haven't told you lately, you are Amazing! Xo
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10th Mar 2014 3:34am
Rain, my cherished friend,
Your words have both lifted my spirit, and humbled me-- simultaneously! Thank you so very much, my friend!! I am most grateful!
(BTW....may i just say that i think that you are the one who is a m a z i n g!)
Poetic respect....and love! Xo
Your words have both lifted my spirit, and humbled me-- simultaneously! Thank you so very much, my friend!! I am most grateful!
(BTW....may i just say that i think that you are the one who is a m a z i n g!)
Poetic respect....and love! Xo
Re: Wretched
9th Mar 2014 8:09pm
Enchantress - sometimes only when our body's torn is there the freedom for our words to soar - cool writings
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10th Mar 2014 3:44am
Whale....i must say that i find myself agreeing with you.
Sometimes our very souls must be sliced wide open, in order for us to 'bleed' our words on parchment....to let our thoughts escape their bonds.
Thank you for visiting within my realm, and for leaving me your sagacious insight. Much appreciated!
Sometimes our very souls must be sliced wide open, in order for us to 'bleed' our words on parchment....to let our thoughts escape their bonds.
Thank you for visiting within my realm, and for leaving me your sagacious insight. Much appreciated!
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re: Re: Wretched
10th Mar 2014 3:52am
Gabriel, my friend,
Thank you for leaving your generous words beneath my poem! You always know how to make me smile! xo
Thanks ever so much for your visit! It is always a pleasure to have you within my realm! :) <3
Thank you for leaving your generous words beneath my poem! You always know how to make me smile! xo
Thanks ever so much for your visit! It is always a pleasure to have you within my realm! :) <3
Re: Wretched
9th Mar 2014 9:33pm
Finding it hard to breathe...you sucked the air right out of me,and that picture it's so sad :( fly butterfly,fly...
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10th Mar 2014 4:05am
O, Hashman, my friend,
Your gracious words have fairly made me catch my breath as well!
Thank you so very much! Your words are so very appreciated!
The picture is--indeed--very sad.....just seemed to match the tone of this piece.....
(the wings of my spirit are gradually mending...i will be soaring....soon.)
Sioch`ain leat!
Your gracious words have fairly made me catch my breath as well!
Thank you so very much! Your words are so very appreciated!
The picture is--indeed--very sad.....just seemed to match the tone of this piece.....
(the wings of my spirit are gradually mending...i will be soaring....soon.)
Sioch`ain leat!
Re: Wretched
10th Mar 2014 00:45am
Enchanted one
This is some surprisingly dark poetry from the get go. Marvelous usage of alliteration going on, maybe continuous instead of continued but hardly a game changer either way.
all in I think this one easily ranks up there as one of your best which is no frivolous accolade
great stuff Miss, fair play, shine on
This is some surprisingly dark poetry from the get go. Marvelous usage of alliteration going on, maybe continuous instead of continued but hardly a game changer either way.
all in I think this one easily ranks up there as one of your best which is no frivolous accolade
great stuff Miss, fair play, shine on
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re: Re: Wretched
10th Mar 2014 4:20am
Awwe...Mo Chara,
Go raibh maith agat.....so very much!
Your support, and encouragement are always deeply appreciated! I am soo very honored that you chose to add this piece to your reading list! This probably the best compliment that you could possibly offer!x
( BTW~~~After considering your suggestion, i find that i agree with you, and will implement the change. Thanks for your keen insight!)
Go raibh maith agat.....so very much!
Your support, and encouragement are always deeply appreciated! I am soo very honored that you chose to add this piece to your reading list! This probably the best compliment that you could possibly offer!x
( BTW~~~After considering your suggestion, i find that i agree with you, and will implement the change. Thanks for your keen insight!)
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10th Mar 2014 4:31am
SW, my friend,
I am bowing my head in humility....such generous comments! You have inspired me---to be certain!
Thank you so much!
I am so surely honored by your reading-list addition...a special thanks, here! I am glad that you enjoyed this piece!
I am bowing my head in humility....such generous comments! You have inspired me---to be certain!
Thank you so much!
I am so surely honored by your reading-list addition...a special thanks, here! I am glad that you enjoyed this piece!
Re: Wretched
10th Mar 2014 3:07am
You've always been worthy; believe it and know it. Your cocoon holds jewels as proof of this poem. Dark doesn't always win. Forgive yourself and fly. Never stop writing.
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Jake,
Thank you, my friend! Your belief in me---in my writing--gives me soo much hope! I am encouraged by your thoughtful,generous, lovely comments!x
Thanks for adding this piece to your reading list! You have truly honored me!!
Your understanding is sincerely appreciated! In time,i will heal....with mended wings i will fly once again....
Thank you, my friend! Your belief in me---in my writing--gives me soo much hope! I am encouraged by your thoughtful,generous, lovely comments!x
Thanks for adding this piece to your reading list! You have truly honored me!!
Your understanding is sincerely appreciated! In time,i will heal....with mended wings i will fly once again....
Re: Wretched
10th Mar 2014 7:37am
"mica eyes" ... Brilliant! I was pulled in by this alone ... As noted by others - your use of alliteration was wonderful ... A gorgeously ghastful write
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10th Mar 2014 11:39am
LSP,
I wish to thank you for your gracious, generous words of praise! Coming from such an accomplished poet, i am so very honored--indeed!
You have truly strengthened my confidence, regarding my use of alliteration. This is one of my favorite poetic devices, and i am delighted that my incorporation has proven to be successful.
It is always a pleasure when you visit my realm, and i am glad that you appreciate my rather grizzly, ('gorgeously ghastful') style! :)
I wish to thank you for your gracious, generous words of praise! Coming from such an accomplished poet, i am so very honored--indeed!
You have truly strengthened my confidence, regarding my use of alliteration. This is one of my favorite poetic devices, and i am delighted that my incorporation has proven to be successful.
It is always a pleasure when you visit my realm, and i am glad that you appreciate my rather grizzly, ('gorgeously ghastful') style! :)
Re: Wretched
11th Mar 2014 11:19am
What can I say or do,
but agree with all of
the above...the
fragility of life is
indeed as vulnerable
as a butterfly's wing,
but there are times when
it can also be as beautiful,
such as when you write...
but agree with all of
the above...the
fragility of life is
indeed as vulnerable
as a butterfly's wing,
but there are times when
it can also be as beautiful,
such as when you write...
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11th Mar 2014 1:50pm
Paul, my faithful Friend,
I am , as always, so very appreciative of your support...your visits to my realm.
Indeed--life is a paradox...harsh, brutal...yet, fragile,and beautiful. Thank you for understanding what is in between my lines....
And for seeing the beauty in my words.:)
I am , as always, so very appreciative of your support...your visits to my realm.
Indeed--life is a paradox...harsh, brutal...yet, fragile,and beautiful. Thank you for understanding what is in between my lines....
And for seeing the beauty in my words.:)
Re: Wretched
11th Mar 2014 9:56pm
My sweet sorceress Awesome script sweets!!
Love the read!!
I adore this new ink!!
Sir Lancelott
Love the read!!
I adore this new ink!!
Sir Lancelott
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12th Mar 2014 00:29am
Ahhhh,Sir Lancelot, my knight,
I am delighted by thy visit within the shadows of my realm! Thou hast been missed--indeed!
I am ever grateful for thy sweet, gracious, generous words of praise!
'Tis glad that i am that my darker ink hath pleased thee. I extend my deepest gratitude to thee!
I am delighted by thy visit within the shadows of my realm! Thou hast been missed--indeed!
I am ever grateful for thy sweet, gracious, generous words of praise!
'Tis glad that i am that my darker ink hath pleased thee. I extend my deepest gratitude to thee!
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My Friend,
Thank you for your generous, lovely comments! Please know how much I truly appreciate, and value, your visits!
Magdalena...you always bring gladness to my spirit, with your gracious words.
Thank you for your generous, lovely comments! Please know how much I truly appreciate, and value, your visits!
Magdalena...you always bring gladness to my spirit, with your gracious words.
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22nd Mar 2014 2:48pm
Nikki, dear friend,
I am honored by your visit, and by your gracious, generous comments! Thank you, ever so much! I am soo appreciative--to be sure!
You are so correct...when the 'soul' is held captive, we are without our 'wings'. Our quality of life disappears--as does our will to l i v e....we merely exist....
I am honored by your visit, and by your gracious, generous comments! Thank you, ever so much! I am soo appreciative--to be sure!
You are so correct...when the 'soul' is held captive, we are without our 'wings'. Our quality of life disappears--as does our will to l i v e....we merely exist....
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re: Re: Wretched
23rd Jul 2014 4:34am
Truly, i appreciate the time that you took to read, and to leave your generous thoughts, beneath this piece!
Thank you so very much!
Ultra, it is a pleasure, indeed, to have you visiting within my realm--once again. Please know that you are always welcome!
Thank you so very much!
Ultra, it is a pleasure, indeed, to have you visiting within my realm--once again. Please know that you are always welcome!
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