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conscious retreat
straight talk, but no talk will do
rough on the edges of that list
you wrote then crumpled in your pocket
dizzy with ideas about ships that sailed
last week, but missed the rocket launch
to catch fireflies instead
don’t get too excited, this isn’t much…
random phrases unless you go backwards,
or read just the first word of every line
i lied
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Re: conscious retreat
5th Mar 2014 5:47am
the enigmas of your lies sting like truths... not to mention, my brain noodles always get a wonky feeling wiggling in your soups
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5th Mar 2014 3:35pm
Re: conscious retreat
5th Mar 2014 6:37am
love the second stanza ... for me it speaks to making choices that make you participate in life - not simply spectate ... Unless you're lying about it
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Re: conscious retreat
5th Mar 2014 11:33am
sometimes - we've got to step back a little especially when fireflies and rockets look the same
good write great Atakti
good write great Atakti
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re: Re: conscious retreat
5th Mar 2014 3:38pm
Trust the whale to find the grain of truth in a VAT of lies...
Thank you, poet.
Thank you, poet.
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