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my blind i
since first i fell aware
to share a thought to share affair
i found myself to be more stable on my feet
with lessons carried through
i felt i'd learned a thing or two
so i failed to plot a course for my defeat
i'd been prowling through the jungles
calling conquest and flushing game
in hopes of catching love birds or a dove
though...love, will not be hunted
so i set to drinking
the largest bottle that life would let me buy
in the quest to find a shot glass full of love
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Re: my blind i
22nd Feb 2014 9:03am
The minuscule i draws attention. Is it possible to drain the bottle of life to the dregs without finding just a swallow of love? Your poem makes me think about that. It's a thought-provoking and tender write, Twitch.
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re: Re: my blind i
22nd Feb 2014 11:39am
I reckon you just may be right Miss Chi. I guess a little more focus on little tastes could change a perspective. Wise words and always a pleasure Miss Chi. xo
Re: my blind i
22nd Feb 2014 11:20am
I love the last stanza, there's a lot out there but all we need is a little. Nicely written, expressed well Twitch. XO ;)
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re: Re: my blind i
22nd Feb 2014 11:41am
Well said Tommie Lynn. I agree completely. Always good to hear from you. Thank you doll. XO
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re: Re: my blind i
Thank you for that lovely comment Rose. And a big humble for your subscription. Trying a few little things differently. I think it maybe softening the edges. Always a pleasure Rose. Again I thank you.
Re: my blind i
22nd Feb 2014 12:47pm
You have inked a piece that leaves me feeling like I should've been drinking that same large bottle, in hopes of finding just a little... Though I admit a taste is nice, but a full on swallow is more gratifying! :) excellent spillage bro.
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re: Re: my blind i
22nd Feb 2014 12:56pm
Luckily for me this is more a reflective piece at the moment Brother. I'm on the love train writing wise at the moment. Lol I'm just rollin along with the tracks my friend. Trying a few different things. Check "angel" brother Poe'. Always love the opinion of a fellow romantic. Thank you as always my friend.
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23rd Feb 2014 00:08am
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re: Re: my blind i
23rd Feb 2014 00:11am
She's a big bottle Miss Crim. I must say I have tasted a little flavour there myself. As always I thank you Miss Crim. You are appreciated.
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22nd Feb 2014 9:22pm
re: Re: my blind i
23rd Feb 2014 00:13am
It is always a pleasure to have you and your kind words in my realm, Whale. I do thank you.
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re: Re: my blind i
24th Feb 2014 00:58am
I think about the most sought after comment beside one's poetry is to be called "beautiful". I really do appreciate you words Mia. I do thank you girl. It means much.
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re: Re: my blind i
24th Feb 2014 1:02am
"Sixtilla"? I have to say Magdalena, I know bugger all about poetry in general. I will have to look further into that. Your support and opinions matter to me Miss Mags. I do thank you.
re: Re: my blind i
24th Feb 2014 1:03am
Brother Hash. Always a pleasure young man. Always a chair in my home my friend. I thank you.