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No Eight Counts
He has confused baring himself
with misanthropy. He pins his own
struggles with a butterfly touch
then slams the case with a left hook.
If raw emotion could be swallowed
like an egg in a glass, he’d do it.
It would be a ticket only event,
front row blood spatter guaranteed.
Some will cheer him on, blows
solid in bruises. A few will curl
their lips. But all, with no exceptions,
want to witness the ‘making of’ —
the ‘breaking of’ even more so.
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21st Feb 2014 2:28pm
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Re: No Eight Counts
21st Feb 2014 3:29pm
Says far more than what is actually written
n I must say, sounds a bit harsh, though HE
likely deserves it lol
n I must say, sounds a bit harsh, though HE
likely deserves it lol
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re: Re: No Eight Counts
21st Feb 2014 4:40pm
Thank you, Poetik. It does say more, and each reader gets their own message!
:)
:)
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21st Feb 2014 3:42pm
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re: Re: No Eight Counts
21st Feb 2014 4:41pm
It was a challenge, I must say. Let us see how it is received in the 'Distance Yourself' comp.
Thank you, Crim!
Thank you, Crim!
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21st Feb 2014 9:22pm
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22nd Feb 2014 6:49pm
Re: No Eight Counts
22nd Feb 2014 7:44am
I can picture Rocky drinking down his raw egg. this speaks for a lot of people, the battles that made them, the defeats that broke them...
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re: Re: No Eight Counts
22nd Feb 2014 6:49pm
I'm glad you think this translates beyond the literal fighter, Feddeler. I do too.
Thank you.
Thank you.
Re: No Eight Counts
22nd Feb 2014 11:42pm
Awesome Fighter connection! Makes the reader want more, where does the Fighter go next? Does he win his "rounds" or more importantly, the Fight? Good Luck! Mike.
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re: Re: No Eight Counts
23rd Feb 2014 7:12am
Oh, this fighter won't break easily...
I may revisit at some point, that's a good idea Mike.
Thank you for your great feedback!
I may revisit at some point, that's a good idea Mike.
Thank you for your great feedback!
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23rd Feb 2014 8:09pm
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re: Re: No Eight Counts
24th Feb 2014 2:40pm
Yes, Mourganna, this fits a certain mindset. I'm thinking honest but brutal. Tough love for breakfast, raw meat for dinner!
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