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animal [feed] [ii]
Hot blooded night sweat cooks my addiction
fatal attraction falls off the bone. My little bleeder
soul redeemer, I tear away chastity from pink bloom
dragging her body thru halls, licking [cum] stained floors
strangling cackles from my provocative whore
Unraveling desires she surrenders to the beast
legs bridal bound, unbowed like mounted bronco collar
tilling sodden fields with my heavy plough
the unearthing [aches] for the rising sun
to reap and sow my seed at first crow
Staring down the barrel, mouthing hammer of dawn
between [bruised] berry wings, sliding night swallows
beating strokes in dripping pools with glint of raven’s eye
feathering her perfectly bent pulsating pulp
I am the animal, pacing, rocking in its cage
Echoes of my savage thrusts pound within her core
leather gloves slapping taut [skin]
spoiling raw meat, beaten into tender molestations
I hold her down with overbearing force
jarring fragility with trembling palpitations
Crushing muscles in vales of smothering kisses
rock [slides] and plunges, swept away in her overflow
backtracking my weeping prey along perineum
fulfilling every crack and crevice
with phallic idols lost deep inside her tomb
Torturous shackles solicit obedience and discipline
poised touch, holding back her churning torrent
tight jam between [creamy] thighs
my fox screams, begging release
from my feral heat, thrusting wild-wooly fuck
Clutching the anger charging thru my veins
winding silk locks within clenched [fist], smearing
my angel’s lust with the devil’s lipstick
and unleash the wrath with white flames
behold, the hunted, devours the feeding game.
Published 2nd Feb 2014
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3rd Feb 2014 5:08pm
The beast unleashed...as it were!
This whole idea of predator vs. prey...a bit un-nerving, but does, nevertheless, invoke your intended imagery--The pursuit, and capture of the hunted(victim), by the hunter.
For those who prefer poetry of this particular genre, then i must say that you have crafted this piece in your own, uniquely creative style....a journey into the darker realms of BDSM.
This whole idea of predator vs. prey...a bit un-nerving, but does, nevertheless, invoke your intended imagery--The pursuit, and capture of the hunted(victim), by the hunter.
For those who prefer poetry of this particular genre, then i must say that you have crafted this piece in your own, uniquely creative style....a journey into the darker realms of BDSM.
Much of my dark erotica explores the boundaries of an Oscar Wilde quote: “Everything in the world is about sex except sex. Sex is about power.”
I think if you strip back the unnerving scenes and the brutality painted in this poem, you are left with a couple of questions....
Who holds the balance of power when it comes to surrendering to lust fuelled sex, the hunter or the hunted?
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When a man loses self-control in the pursuit of power or a woman succumbs to her needs to be powerless, who's feeding who?
The intention of the poem is to challenge the reader about the concept of sex and power, so I'm pleased that you found it unnerving and appreciated my craft at the same time.
Thank you, my friend.
I think if you strip back the unnerving scenes and the brutality painted in this poem, you are left with a couple of questions....
Who holds the balance of power when it comes to surrendering to lust fuelled sex, the hunter or the hunted?
[&]
When a man loses self-control in the pursuit of power or a woman succumbs to her needs to be powerless, who's feeding who?
The intention of the poem is to challenge the reader about the concept of sex and power, so I'm pleased that you found it unnerving and appreciated my craft at the same time.
Thank you, my friend.
3rd Feb 2014 10:26pm
3rd Feb 2014 11:34pm
Escalated tensions here, on the physical level (sex and the urge for sex, I see two separate drives), on the psychological level (power struggles and strategies, clouded by blind emotions) and on the primal instinctual level, to connect where words cannot go. The language fits all that... so yeah, heat and flare. All the above, JMHO.
A very apt sequel to part [i], Case, awesome work.
A very apt sequel to part [i], Case, awesome work.
Atakti, I'm stoked the poem triggered so much thought and I'm nodding in total agreement at everything you've placed on the table... except, if you ever say JMHO again, grrrrrrr.
Thank you for your great feedback, Atakti. I always appreciate your insights and your opinion on my work.
Thank you for your great feedback, Atakti. I always appreciate your insights and your opinion on my work.
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4th Feb 2014 2:28am
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The sequel was more challenging to write than I anticipated. There was always meant to be a sequel, but a lot has changed since the original concept of the poem that I came up with 6 months ago.
I initially wanted to continue the story from where I left off in the original animal [feed], but it wasn't working for me as my muse for this piece and writing style has changed. You're bang on with the central theme of the sequel, there is a twist in the last stanza suggesting the presence of a switch in the power game.
Vee, thank you for your great feedback and constant support.
I initially wanted to continue the story from where I left off in the original animal [feed], but it wasn't working for me as my muse for this piece and writing style has changed. You're bang on with the central theme of the sequel, there is a twist in the last stanza suggesting the presence of a switch in the power game.
Vee, thank you for your great feedback and constant support.
9th Mar 2014 2:46am
How dare you reduce the act of love to animalistic desire? What are you trying to do, be honest?
Forgive my sarcasm, it was a great piece.
Reminded me of a line from one of Tennessee William's plays. Burl Ives is 'Big Daddy' and he scolds Liz Taylor and Paul Newman, "I hear you go at it like two cats on a hot tin roof."
Forgive my sarcasm, it was a great piece.
Reminded me of a line from one of Tennessee William's plays. Burl Ives is 'Big Daddy' and he scolds Liz Taylor and Paul Newman, "I hear you go at it like two cats on a hot tin roof."
24th Mar 2014 10:21am
We all have animals inside us, some of us have domestic cats and some of us have jaguars. I'm a big cat man myself... thanks for your amusing comment Mr Buck.
16th Mar 2014 11:44pm
You touch on that question of instinct that the philosophers love to go on and on about. Generally we don't bring such a variety of animals into the same reference but it certainly all points (no pun intended) in the same direction.
Nicely penned
Nicely penned
24th Mar 2014 10:26am
Hey JAZZ, yeah, the animal is in all of us, some of us are just more fearful to let it out of its cage... thanks for dropping by and sharing your thoughts.
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17th Mar 2014 4:24pm
I echo Atakti and Vee's comments. They've summed up what I couldn't possibly put into my own words. Good thing you recently added the video, otherwise I would have never known this was published. Speechless, at how your mind creates, Case...Xo
Pen Respect~
Pen Respect~
Rain, I'm always stoked to see your comments and nod of approval, even speechless says it all... especially when so many hours are spent putting these video poems together. Thank heaps.
18th Mar 2014 8:57pm
24th Mar 2014 10:34am
PoetryQueen, it's awesome knowing you thought it was awesome. Thank you for adding both poems to your reading list.
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22nd Mar 2014 3:45pm
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24th Mar 2014 11:14am
Nikki, thanks heaps for lending me your voice... I don't think the punters are ready to hear cassie [although you seemed intrigued by her voice].
Yeah, a lot of time and thought is spent sourcing images online and picking the right ones to tie in with the poem. So it's really cool your digging the images and the creativity in the music arrangement.
I'm stoked you like the moving images and that you're getting a kick out of working on the vids. Thanks heaps for all your help.
Yeah, a lot of time and thought is spent sourcing images online and picking the right ones to tie in with the poem. So it's really cool your digging the images and the creativity in the music arrangement.
I'm stoked you like the moving images and that you're getting a kick out of working on the vids. Thanks heaps for all your help.