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You're Standing on my Grave
~You're standing on my grave
can't you see ?
The brittle leaves have finally gone away.
Orchards of your morgue scented whispers
silently sway to their resting place,
longing still to feel the fleeting fingers of day.
Those roots reach and twist tighter around
the splendor of rest that you call, ecstasy in decay
You're kneeling on my grave
can't you see?
Across clear rivers that ran their course to deliver me.
Marking with your eyes the Moon's path tonight
You can't see the stars for the clouds, I cry out!
You're walking away from my grave
can't you see?
The wind slowly pulled you away again.
Won't you stay just a little longer today?!
can't you see ?
The brittle leaves have finally gone away.
Orchards of your morgue scented whispers
silently sway to their resting place,
longing still to feel the fleeting fingers of day.
Those roots reach and twist tighter around
the splendor of rest that you call, ecstasy in decay
You're kneeling on my grave
can't you see?
Across clear rivers that ran their course to deliver me.
Marking with your eyes the Moon's path tonight
You can't see the stars for the clouds, I cry out!
You're walking away from my grave
can't you see?
The wind slowly pulled you away again.
Won't you stay just a little longer today?!
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Re: You're Standing on my Grave
31st Jan 2014 5:50pm
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Thank you, my inspiration came more from a song and my love for graveyards, than anything else. :)
Re: You're Standing on my Grave
31st Jan 2014 7:03pm
Love the cadence and structure with this. You're internal rhyme and alliteration makes this pop! Simple subtlety but woven nicely.
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re: Re: You're Standing on my Grave
31st Jan 2014 7:21pm
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31st Jan 2014 7:10pm
What an interesting ink. The perspective use was so creative, and as always you are a wizard with words.
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31st Jan 2014 7:22pm
Re: You're Standing on my Grave
31st Jan 2014 10:19pm
WOW a lot of creative emotion in this piece sweets!!
Awesomely constructed Ms. Blue!!!
Great read!!
Sir Lancelott
Awesomely constructed Ms. Blue!!!
Great read!!
Sir Lancelott
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re: Re: You're Standing on my Grave
1st Feb 2014 00:42am
Thank you, Sir.. I tend to dip deep in emotion when I'm in the graveyard :)
Re: You're Standing on my Grave
1st Feb 2014 00:43am
you incorporated a touch of anaphora into this, smoothly. lyrical & lonely. we all need a little company...
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re: Re: You're Standing on my Grave
1st Feb 2014 00:50am
yes, I was flexing my anaphora wings.. Thank you so very much. Being in company of whispers is very pleasing :)
Re: You're Standing on my Grave
1st Feb 2014 10:51pm
Oh how I love this. I too love grave yards and u have painted this pefectly. The longing desire the wicked attraction tht lures you in to visit and stay lean against headstones and feel cold bones. Beautiful my Blue Angel beautiful
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2nd Feb 2014 5:44am
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2nd Feb 2014 5:45am
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2nd Feb 2014 10:19am
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2nd Feb 2014 6:21pm
I'm honored by that... I enjoyed your walk upon hallowed ground.. :) Thank you, deeply*
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Re: You're Standing on my Grave
2nd Feb 2014 9:56pm
Omgoodness...what a piece!
"Those roots reach and twist tighter around
the splendor of rest that you call, ecstasy in decay"
That line and the very last one struck me...nice work B.A...
"Those roots reach and twist tighter around
the splendor of rest that you call, ecstasy in decay"
That line and the very last one struck me...nice work B.A...
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re: Re: You're Standing on my Grave
3rd Feb 2014 3:44pm
Thank you very much,,, I think that last line speaks a lot of how rushed we are nowadays :) It's like, slow down and enjoy life, before it's over...
Re: You're Standing on my Grave
2nd Feb 2014 11:45pm
Blue Angel, your poem is very lyrical written and convey the talk with dead souls..
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3rd Feb 2014 3:42pm
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Re: You're Standing on my Grave
5th Feb 2014 3:38am
I’d like to have enough time and quiet
To think about absolutely nothing,
To not ever feel myself living,
To only know myself in others’ eyes, reflected.
Sorry, I wish you would remove the last line. Otherwise, superb
To think about absolutely nothing,
To not ever feel myself living,
To only know myself in others’ eyes, reflected.
Sorry, I wish you would remove the last line. Otherwise, superb
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Re: You're Standing on my Grave
5th Feb 2014 5:16am
The plea "can't you see" is a siren pulling us into the sadness of those left behind - haunting
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12th Feb 2014 9:42pm
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Re: You're Standing on my Grave
11th Mar 2014 8:32am
No words for this fantastic poem! Dark emotion, crawling into your mind as you read it. Just WOW!
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