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Predator
I
am your
predator
watching
transfixed
obsessed
l o n g i n g
these
the preceding
cuts
of pleasure
in hunting
you
visualising
r e s t r a i n i n g
b r e a t h i n g
your
sensual
sexual
ambience
I cry out in
resonating
body felt
pain
from atop these walls
of the castle of
desire
I bury
myself
so very
deep
in stone
to repel the
d r a w i n g
to resist the
v a c u u m
between us
that insists
I
taste
your flesh
until
solid ground
her strength
in millennia formed fingers
that cage time itself
fails
her grip
on my desire
for you
time
can not
will
not
hold my
voracious
c r a v i n g
I R O A R!!!
every muscle
f l e x e d
I
will
descend
from atop these walls
unleashed
in ravenous
vicious
beastly
hunger
I
will attack
eyes fixed
c l o s i n g in
to devour
You
am your
predator
watching
transfixed
obsessed
l o n g i n g
these
the preceding
cuts
of pleasure
in hunting
you
visualising
r e s t r a i n i n g
b r e a t h i n g
your
sensual
sexual
ambience
I cry out in
resonating
body felt
pain
from atop these walls
of the castle of
desire
I bury
myself
so very
deep
in stone
to repel the
d r a w i n g
to resist the
v a c u u m
between us
that insists
I
taste
your flesh
until
solid ground
her strength
in millennia formed fingers
that cage time itself
fails
her grip
on my desire
for you
time
can not
will
not
hold my
voracious
c r a v i n g
I R O A R!!!
every muscle
f l e x e d
I
will
descend
from atop these walls
unleashed
in ravenous
vicious
beastly
hunger
I
will attack
eyes fixed
c l o s i n g in
to devour
You
Written by
twitchnsway
(Twitch Sway)
Published 17th Jan 2014
| Edited 18th Jan 2014
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Anonymous
- Edited 16th May 2018 11:39am
17th Jan 2014 6:31am
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re: Re: Predator
17th Jan 2014 6:40am
Thank you once again Ms Dee. Your words always mean much to me. You are appreciated.
Re: Predator
17th Jan 2014 7:05am
"I will
descend
from atop these walls"
It's like a shadow following you; the battle inside. Really liked this piece, really like your words.
descend
from atop these walls"
It's like a shadow following you; the battle inside. Really liked this piece, really like your words.
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Your opinions valued Ms Heart. Cause that's what I saw when it went down on paper. Thanks a bunch for that. So glad you saw the same. Always nice to know a msg has got across. I appreciate your words greatly. Thank you Ms H.
Re: Predator
17th Jan 2014 11:51am
Damn TS, I read this repeatedly and each time it was hotter and hotter.That feeling of being watched, waiting for the hunter to pounce on it's prey. Finally being released!Devoured!You get me going love.Thank you. XO
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re: Re: Predator
17th Jan 2014 12:01pm
To affect you in such a way is pleasure to me my dearest. Your awesome Tommie Lynn. Thanks doll. XO
Anonymous
- Edited 26th Jun 2018 9:39pm
17th Jan 2014 12:32pm
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re: Re: Predator
17th Jan 2014 1:14pm
Ms Lily Mae. So lovely to see you in my realm my dear. Thank you so much for your words. Stoked that you felt this. Very cool. Your opinion means much Miss. You are appreciated for sure.
Re: Predator
Intriguing....Chills!
When i read this, i sense a bit of a subtle metaphor...almost that of the mysterious, legendary gargoyle: "...from atop these walls/of the castle of/desire/I bury/myself/so very/deep/in stone...."
Your particular choice of spacing--regarding the words associated with the more intense, predatory qualities of the (inner)'beast'--truly seem to enhance the desperate, tension of the 'back-and-forth' struggle...between 'predator', and 'prey.'
Appreciate the un-nerving,'dangerous' aspect of this poem...has me glancing --nervously-- over my shoulder with each reading! ;)
A very well done to you, my Friend!
When i read this, i sense a bit of a subtle metaphor...almost that of the mysterious, legendary gargoyle: "...from atop these walls/of the castle of/desire/I bury/myself/so very/deep/in stone...."
Your particular choice of spacing--regarding the words associated with the more intense, predatory qualities of the (inner)'beast'--truly seem to enhance the desperate, tension of the 'back-and-forth' struggle...between 'predator', and 'prey.'
Appreciate the un-nerving,'dangerous' aspect of this poem...has me glancing --nervously-- over my shoulder with each reading! ;)
A very well done to you, my Friend!
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re: Re: Predator
17th Jan 2014 3:00pm
Well, it seems to have hit the mark then Enchantress. Lol And thank you for reminding me about the pic. I had one lined up and forgot. I believe you pictured the same thing I did. Your views and opinions greatly appreciated once again my dear. I thank you.
re: re: Re: Predator
17th Jan 2014 4:01pm
You are most welcome! If 'great minds, think alike',perhaps creative ones do, as well! (gol!)
Anyhow, glad that i reminded you of the pic...indeed--a fitting one , at that! :)
Anyhow, glad that i reminded you of the pic...indeed--a fitting one , at that! :)
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17th Jan 2014 4:32pm
In some cases, evidently, they do my dear. Good on ya Enchantress. Champion!
Re: Predator
17th Jan 2014 3:59pm
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A wonderful compliment to be sure Miss Brit. Good to see ya. I appreciate your visit and words greatly Miss B. They mean much. I thank you.
Re: Predator
17th Jan 2014 4:45pm
OMG! You're really good at that! You're depicting the voracious predator with haunting and so gripping words that I feel thrilled and aroused at the same time. The staccato style emphasizes the predator's 'appetite' and the urgency of the hunt. Caprivating write, Twitch! Thanks for regaling us with your 'other side' :-). Cool pic, too!
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Ah, Miss Chi. As always you humble me with your so kind words. I am we'll pleased to have affected you so. I always look forward to your visits my dear. I thank you so very much for your continued support. And yeah, he's a menacing looking character isn't he? He fit the bill perfectly. Deep appreciation Ms Chi. Deep.
Re: Predator
17th Jan 2014 5:56pm
Well done Twitch! I like this passage a lot:
"to resist the
vacuum
between us"
perfectly describes unrelenting attraction.
"to resist the
vacuum
between us"
perfectly describes unrelenting attraction.
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re: Re: Predator
17th Jan 2014 6:22pm
Sir GW. It is a pleasure to have you visit my castle brother. And your very kind words means so much to me my friend. You are appreciated sir. I thank you.
Re: Predator
17th Jan 2014 11:04pm
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18th Jan 2014 5:18am
Mr H. How'd you be sir? And, yeah! There's a bit of it around. Gol! Is a pleasure as always bro. I thank you muchly Champ.
Re: Predator
18th Jan 2014 3:29pm
This line is especially intriguing.
"to resist the
v a c u u m
between us"
I love it, well done.
"to resist the
v a c u u m
between us"
I love it, well done.
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19th Jan 2014 1:35am
Thanks a bunch for that Miss Nikoletta. Good to hear from you. You are appreciated.
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Anonymous
18th Jan 2014 11:27pm
Mannn! This one was dope! :) Really, really love this! The creativity in your pen shined in this one, Sway. Well done! Xo
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re: Re: Predator
19th Jan 2014 1:43am
Wo! Huge words! Great feeling when you hit the mark, isn't it? Big smiles M'lady. Big smiles. I thank you constantly Lady Rain. It means much. Xo
Anonymous
- Edited 27th Aug 2021 5:37pm
24th Jan 2014 2:06pm
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re: Re: Predator
25th Jan 2014 00:46am
Always pleasure Sir PS. Nice to know it hit its mark. Much appreciation Sir. I thank you.