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Why must I build crosses
and crucify myself
these days I barely survive the nails
not to mention the countless people throwing rocks
and stabbing me with their spears
please don't misunderstand
the games I play warrant a good stoning
and some day, they're sure to leave me lifeless
today I feel nothing, I've lost most everything
'cept the clothes on my back
and the blood that runs through my veins
these games, these damn games have ruined me
if I could offer a blind mans advice
it'd be worth a listen
but I feel nothing, so there are no words
wise or otherwise profound
and crucify myself
these days I barely survive the nails
not to mention the countless people throwing rocks
and stabbing me with their spears
please don't misunderstand
the games I play warrant a good stoning
and some day, they're sure to leave me lifeless
today I feel nothing, I've lost most everything
'cept the clothes on my back
and the blood that runs through my veins
these games, these damn games have ruined me
if I could offer a blind mans advice
it'd be worth a listen
but I feel nothing, so there are no words
wise or otherwise profound
Published 13th Jan 2014
| Edited 14th Jan 2014
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Anonymous
- Edited 15th Feb 2019 4:35pm
14th Jan 2014 00:13am
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14th Jan 2014 1:30am
Princess, you have no idea how many times my hand was poised on the delete option.
there's a fine line between look at who I am and pity me, even though there is no 'pity me' intended I can see where it may be interpreted that way. I only hope people familiar with my scribings can see the difference.
I thank you, really thank you for knowing said difference and see it as a testament to our understandings.
thank you also for dropping by and leaving words that not only made me smile but also gave me encouragement.
shine on
there's a fine line between look at who I am and pity me, even though there is no 'pity me' intended I can see where it may be interpreted that way. I only hope people familiar with my scribings can see the difference.
I thank you, really thank you for knowing said difference and see it as a testament to our understandings.
thank you also for dropping by and leaving words that not only made me smile but also gave me encouragement.
shine on
14th Jan 2014 00:48am
Sometimes One must rest...Dawn comes back around...course I'm not a morning person...so eye on the stars-This Write was worthy of them-Excellence Always Lepp-Pen On Good Sir!!!
14th Jan 2014 1:34am
Soul
your words mean more than mere letters strung together, and I thank you kindly for laying them down here. Your comment is poetic in itself
thanks a bunch for all your support and kind words too
your words mean more than mere letters strung together, and I thank you kindly for laying them down here. Your comment is poetic in itself
thanks a bunch for all your support and kind words too
Anonymous
- Edited 15th Apr 2019 9:40pm
14th Jan 2014 1:23am
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14th Jan 2014 1:40am
Ahh Crims, the prodigal child returns
I'm afraid your comment has left me speechless, though I could do with a beer and a toke
thank you most kindly for the visit and wonderful words dear Lady
shine on
I'm afraid your comment has left me speechless, though I could do with a beer and a toke
thank you most kindly for the visit and wonderful words dear Lady
shine on
14th Jan 2014 2:22am
Ahh, you played those fucking games too?
This isn't pity mate, it's a peek into a life. I know first hand how pointless it is to say this, but try not to second guess yourself, there's a reason so many of us come back to your page time and time again. I've never read a poem of yours that hasn't had the right balance.
This isn't pity mate, it's a peek into a life. I know first hand how pointless it is to say this, but try not to second guess yourself, there's a reason so many of us come back to your page time and time again. I've never read a poem of yours that hasn't had the right balance.
14th Jan 2014 2:47am
Melodyman
your a wise man, I tend to second guess myself a lot, hence all the hidden poetry within my backlog.
I thank you most kindly also for your continued support and encouragement and mean it when I say I appreciate it
your a wise man, I tend to second guess myself a lot, hence all the hidden poetry within my backlog.
I thank you most kindly also for your continued support and encouragement and mean it when I say I appreciate it
Anonymous
- Edited 16th May 2018 11:39am
14th Jan 2014 4:01am
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14th Jan 2014 10:23am
Petit one
its not good you can relate, though I think you may be missing the bigger picture, but that's totally cool cos I kinda hid it
I get it though, the need for something, anything to fill the void
thanks much for your visit and kind words
shine on
its not good you can relate, though I think you may be missing the bigger picture, but that's totally cool cos I kinda hid it
I get it though, the need for something, anything to fill the void
thanks much for your visit and kind words
shine on
14th Jan 2014 4:16am
14th Jan 2014 10:26am
Ahh be god, ic is isn't the elusive Tommy gracing my page with her beauty
thanks for the visit and kind words dear Lady
thanks for the visit and kind words dear Lady
14th Jan 2014 9:33pm
Taking a deep breath and opening our eyes in the bright light... hurts for a bit, but so much better than staying blind.
You always reach, get us where heart meets mind. Wonderful write... no title, huh? I get it.
You always reach, get us where heart meets mind. Wonderful write... no title, huh? I get it.
14th Jan 2014 11:32pm
Ata
jaysis, can't you comment without upstaging my poem :P
you are right of course, and I thank you for your wisdom.
a blind man once asked me to help him cross the road, I told him if he put one foot in front of the other enough times he'd get across in no time at all
thanks for the visit and kind words dear Lady
jaysis, can't you comment without upstaging my poem :P
you are right of course, and I thank you for your wisdom.
a blind man once asked me to help him cross the road, I told him if he put one foot in front of the other enough times he'd get across in no time at all
thanks for the visit and kind words dear Lady
15th Jan 2014 5:52am
Believe me, the way you said it is so much more powerful... No upstaging intended, lol.
15th Jan 2014 6:45am
Sometimes I wonder if never feeling pain is better than feeling a lifetime of it. Perhaps it is a road we must all cross to truly see ourselves... to truly feel.
This poem is honest and touched my heart more so than I would like. I hope you get through it and are more alive than ever. ~Megan.
This poem is honest and touched my heart more so than I would like. I hope you get through it and are more alive than ever. ~Megan.
15th Jan 2014 7:15am
Megan, welcome to this place of mine
that's a hard one, given the choice I'd rather a balance of pain at least sometimes else how would we learn from our errors, pain is not always negative I think, at least something positive can come out of it
I thank you most sincerely for your concern and best wishes, also thank you for dropping by and leaving your thoughts
shine on
that's a hard one, given the choice I'd rather a balance of pain at least sometimes else how would we learn from our errors, pain is not always negative I think, at least something positive can come out of it
I thank you most sincerely for your concern and best wishes, also thank you for dropping by and leaving your thoughts
shine on
15th Jan 2014 12:22pm
it reminded me of a song which goes like this..
'it takes a worried man to sing a worried song'
now back on topic, it's alright to feel whatever you felt the moment you wrote it and it takes downright courage to post it.
This is partly because you had the guts to show us how you really felt with this profound poem. Seeking no pity is what I admire in you most. And, because you're one honest man and most of all honest to yourself. Keep it as a memorandum, don't delete it; let it be a reminder that better days and writes (that is optimistic) will come.
'it takes a worried man to sing a worried song'
now back on topic, it's alright to feel whatever you felt the moment you wrote it and it takes downright courage to post it.
This is partly because you had the guts to show us how you really felt with this profound poem. Seeking no pity is what I admire in you most. And, because you're one honest man and most of all honest to yourself. Keep it as a memorandum, don't delete it; let it be a reminder that better days and writes (that is optimistic) will come.
15th Jan 2014 7:35pm
Ophie, dear Lady, I've missed you much, stranger
I'll be leaving it here mostly because of the great words of encouragement and wisdom posted by commentators like yourself and others.
it really is great to see you back knocking around and I thank you for dropping by and leaving your brain print
shine on
I'll be leaving it here mostly because of the great words of encouragement and wisdom posted by commentators like yourself and others.
it really is great to see you back knocking around and I thank you for dropping by and leaving your brain print
shine on
15th Jan 2014 12:44pm
15th Jan 2014 7:37pm
15th Jan 2014 3:01pm
a very raw, powerful and heartfelt write...deep soul searching...the answers will come in time...give everything you are feeling room to breathe...
15th Jan 2014 7:40pm
Jemac , dear Lady
you are a wise one and as such I will take your advice and carry on carrying on
thank you kindly for the visit and words
shine on
you are a wise one and as such I will take your advice and carry on carrying on
thank you kindly for the visit and words
shine on
Self-perception <--> self-worth--
Self-persecution <--> self-preservation...
and so,we somehow find ourselves pulled within this seeming endless, perpetual feed-back loop...an invariable tug-of-war with our ("2") selves...
But in the end,it would appear,that we are all a bit guilty of wearing the 'masks', and playing the 'games', that help us to carry on.
This piece not only leaves finger-prints upon the soul, but it reaches right inside, grabs the soul, and refuses to let go!
Inked with Insight--and Courage--mo Chara!
Wise Words...Well Worth the Wait!
Self-persecution <--> self-preservation...
and so,we somehow find ourselves pulled within this seeming endless, perpetual feed-back loop...an invariable tug-of-war with our ("2") selves...
But in the end,it would appear,that we are all a bit guilty of wearing the 'masks', and playing the 'games', that help us to carry on.
This piece not only leaves finger-prints upon the soul, but it reaches right inside, grabs the soul, and refuses to let go!
Inked with Insight--and Courage--mo Chara!
Wise Words...Well Worth the Wait!
15th Jan 2014 8:04pm
Bhean álainn
go raibh maith agut sna focal duirt tu agum
there is much wisdom in your words and I appreciate the time you took to lay them down.
I'm happy to have touched then grabbed your soul, I'm sure its well worth a study
thank you kindly for dropping by and leaving your profoundly profoundness :)
go raibh maith agut sna focal duirt tu agum
there is much wisdom in your words and I appreciate the time you took to lay them down.
I'm happy to have touched then grabbed your soul, I'm sure its well worth a study
thank you kindly for dropping by and leaving your profoundly profoundness :)
15th Jan 2014 9:56pm
You are most welcome! My thanks to you, as well, for your lovely , generous reply!
'Profoundly Profoundness'....now that is a treasure--to be certain! :)
'Profoundly Profoundness'....now that is a treasure--to be certain! :)
Anonymous
19th Jan 2014 00:11am
I really love how you admitted playing games dangerous enough to bring repercussions. Acknowledging wrongdoing remorsefully, shows courage. Okay, I may be totally off the mark of this ink,.... don't hang me.
btw...I disagree with your last two lines. You've definitely dropped some wisdom here, because I see words that speak to be careful about the decisions you make, for they can very well be your down fall. Love this Craig! Xo
btw...I disagree with your last two lines. You've definitely dropped some wisdom here, because I see words that speak to be careful about the decisions you make, for they can very well be your down fall. Love this Craig! Xo
19th Jan 2014 00:44am
Rain
I've played games all my life, it when we lose the problems arise and the remorse sets in. I'm not sure wrongdoing is appropriate but I'll not hang you for that :)
I thank you most kindly for your words and am delighted to see you rain yourself into this page .
I've played games all my life, it when we lose the problems arise and the remorse sets in. I'm not sure wrongdoing is appropriate but I'll not hang you for that :)
I thank you most kindly for your words and am delighted to see you rain yourself into this page .
Anonymous
- Edited 14th Nov 2018 6:35pm
26th Jan 2014 12:59pm
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26th Jan 2014 1:47pm
Miss Maggie
sorry to hear you can relate, and indeed recall the time and date which must make things very memorable.
I should say that I used an amount of poetic licence while writing this and assure you that I'm not sleeping in doorways or other such luxuries.
thank you for your kindness, concern and sharing, much appreciated,
shine on
sorry to hear you can relate, and indeed recall the time and date which must make things very memorable.
I should say that I used an amount of poetic licence while writing this and assure you that I'm not sleeping in doorways or other such luxuries.
thank you for your kindness, concern and sharing, much appreciated,
shine on
Anonymous
- Edited 14th Nov 2018 6:35pm
26th Jan 2014 2:12pm
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