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My monster: leukemia (The Original)
Today I woke up,
same story again.
life... a bore.
time.. slowly passing by.
you? happy and joyous,
me? dying slowly inside and out.
You see I have a disease
Not the normal HIV or STD's
No, I have leukemia
I try to live on and be happy
while I know I actually am fading away.
Does it show?
Yes
Am I afraid?
yes
Will it kill me eventually?
yes
but you see
I am not dying only from this
its also the way I see the world
liars, cheats, hate
the world has no compassion
we live day to day filled with false love
lust, pain, and never knowing what is true and false.
I feel alone.
afraid
sad
like a child lost in the dark
what's that noise?
who's there?
Do you wish to harm me?
Where's my mommy?
I want to cry.
But I won't
I'm to weak to let others see my pain.
so today.
tomorrow.
Until the day I die.
I will be alone and afraid.
Will you try to help me?
same story again.
life... a bore.
time.. slowly passing by.
you? happy and joyous,
me? dying slowly inside and out.
You see I have a disease
Not the normal HIV or STD's
No, I have leukemia
I try to live on and be happy
while I know I actually am fading away.
Does it show?
Yes
Am I afraid?
yes
Will it kill me eventually?
yes
but you see
I am not dying only from this
its also the way I see the world
liars, cheats, hate
the world has no compassion
we live day to day filled with false love
lust, pain, and never knowing what is true and false.
I feel alone.
afraid
sad
like a child lost in the dark
what's that noise?
who's there?
Do you wish to harm me?
Where's my mommy?
I want to cry.
But I won't
I'm to weak to let others see my pain.
so today.
tomorrow.
Until the day I die.
I will be alone and afraid.
Will you try to help me?
Published 13th Jan 2014
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- Edited 14th May 2018 9:46pm
13th Jan 2014 4:06pm
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13th Jan 2014 4:08pm
You have captured the emotions, tackling a difficult topic.
If you want to push your writing, go over it again and think "show" not tell. For example, instead of:
the way I see the world
you could write:
the lens flicker in shades of hate
Don't be afraid to be cryptic. Thanks for the read.
If you want to push your writing, go over it again and think "show" not tell. For example, instead of:
the way I see the world
you could write:
the lens flicker in shades of hate
Don't be afraid to be cryptic. Thanks for the read.
14th Jan 2014 7:40am
I very much agree with the comments before mine, specially Atakti's. You got it there, the emotions and it's really good that you've chosen an interesting topic, it's something fresh to read. All in all, a real good poem.
