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Undercurrents
A long tunnel connects you
to nothingness. Occasionally
the sun lances through pockmarks
punched in the roof. More often
than not, the rain drips in mud, guts
and glory, which they taught us once
at the flotilla academy of disorder,
though graduation comes at the start.
The water rises and your rudder unsticks,
useless in its mono-directional
lament. The sides scrape off in wooden
zests, sour shavings that float, bloated.
Entered in 'dreams' competition.
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1st Jan 2014 7:05am
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1st Jan 2014 9:45pm
thanks for the welcome. So far I really like your work its really good you have talent my friend. you can call me Joe or JWA if you wish but J works to. Keep up the good work
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1st Jan 2014 9:10pm
Re: Undercurrents
1st Jan 2014 10:48am
'guts and glory': highest achievement of the criminally insane at the Academy...
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2nd Jan 2014 11:37am
Re: Undercurrents
3rd Jan 2014 4:06am
Though graduation comes at the start
That gave me the giggles for a minute.
That gave me the giggles for a minute.
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3rd Jan 2014 5:20am
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3rd Jan 2014 6:05am
There's probably a fair few buds floating around in my bloodstream.... You have to tell me if your a cop, right?
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Re: Undercurrents
3rd Jan 2014 7:14am
I don't know what's going on, but all my homies are getting prolific on my ass... I can't keep up with my reading.
Very cool lines and images here, Atakti. Mud, guts and glory blitz with wooden zests, makes one hell of a dreamy cocktail for the ears and marinade for the mind.
Concise and sharp, I'm loving everything you're serving.
Very cool lines and images here, Atakti. Mud, guts and glory blitz with wooden zests, makes one hell of a dreamy cocktail for the ears and marinade for the mind.
Concise and sharp, I'm loving everything you're serving.
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re: Re: Undercurrents
4th Jan 2014 9:42pm
Dreamy cocktails are the theme of the week... Hush, nuff said.
Thanks for the look-in, pleased you're diggin' the work!
:)
Thanks for the look-in, pleased you're diggin' the work!
:)
Re: Undercurrents
4th Jan 2014 8:22pm
Not a word wasted, a breath of fresh air.
A wonderful start to the new year.
A wonderful start to the new year.
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4th Jan 2014 9:43pm