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if you would
stand here with me
on your balcony at dawn,
the day is cold but
warm in your arms,
my head on your shoulder,
fingertips trace
the small of my back,
invite me closer
and I would buy
your silence,
it is golden
to kiss your lips,
taste words
unfolding,
I would hush
all memories
up to this moment,
say your name
as if it is foreign,
when it falls
from my tongue
to your skin,
I grow feverish
from wanting
to set fire
to this need,
take me in
and lay me down
across your
unmade bed,
you've offered
the world
but I'll have
you instead
on your balcony at dawn,
the day is cold but
warm in your arms,
my head on your shoulder,
fingertips trace
the small of my back,
invite me closer
and I would buy
your silence,
it is golden
to kiss your lips,
taste words
unfolding,
I would hush
all memories
up to this moment,
say your name
as if it is foreign,
when it falls
from my tongue
to your skin,
I grow feverish
from wanting
to set fire
to this need,
take me in
and lay me down
across your
unmade bed,
you've offered
the world
but I'll have
you instead
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5th Dec 2013 00:20am
thank you so much, I struggled with the corniness of it but it came from the heart!! :)
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5th Dec 2013 4:47pm
Very beautiful and elegant erotic poem, nice ink. And I like especially the last stanza
"you've offered the world but I'll have you instead". Bravissimo for your first poem, here!
"you've offered the world but I'll have you instead". Bravissimo for your first poem, here!
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9th Dec 2013 12:56pm
I very much appreciate your reading and feedback and I'm so glad you liked it!
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9th Dec 2013 12:58pm
thank you so much! I try not to be such a perfectionist, lol. I can see that sometimes I should let go of my own expectations.
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6th Dec 2013 8:39am
A beautiful and heartfelt write.
My favorite stanza since it's so
tender and sweet:
[...] and I would buy
your silence,
it is golden
to kiss your lips,
taste words
unfolding [...]
My favorite stanza since it's so
tender and sweet:
[...] and I would buy
your silence,
it is golden
to kiss your lips,
taste words
unfolding [...]
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9th Dec 2013 1:00pm
thank you so much, I think that is my favorite line as well. silence is undoubtedly golden, especially when it comes to a moment where words only hinder a feeling. :)
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10th Dec 2013 1:06am
"the day is cold but
warm in your arms"
just three poems in of yours and so many memorable/poignant gems waiting to flash across my mind, thank you for you
warm in your arms"
just three poems in of yours and so many memorable/poignant gems waiting to flash across my mind, thank you for you
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19th Dec 2013 7:57pm
to set fire
to this need,
take me in
and lay me down
across your
unmade bed,
you've offered
the world
but I'll have
you instead
marvelous thoughts
to this need,
take me in
and lay me down
across your
unmade bed,
you've offered
the world
but I'll have
you instead
marvelous thoughts
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