cause [&] affection

Cool write, I like the whole set up, first two lines are killer "relentless pull of orbiting svabhava stars" <<<<Sweet!

Yeah, After writing those first two lines I just sat there looking at the screen thinking, "hmmm, is that it??" I thought the page looked a bit bare so I pushed on.

Thanks heaps, Nikki. Always dig your feedback.

 

Thanks for letting the word of the lord into your kneading heart.

Gabriel, I'm always stoked when you drop by giving your romantic heart of approval. Being a brother wave rider, I know you'd truly appreciate the forces at play in the ocean and from the heart. Thanks for digging the lines.

Vee, I always appreciate the time you take deciphering my abstract poems. There are many layers of words and underlying meanings injected into the lines to make the reader feel the power of emotion.
 
Thank you so much for your kind words.

diggin' the whirlwind spin around dead man's curve. love is like that...

Mr Feddeler, I'm totally digging that you're diggin' the inertia of love.

Incredibly dynamic piece writing here Mr. Case ... Excellent flow ...

LSP

Brother LSP, I'm stoked by your comments. Thank for your kind words and for adding this piece to your reading list.  

"svabhava stars" is my new fav phrase... (the galaxy has been pulling at my attention lately)

a thrilling combination of love, violence, celestial art... a lot going on, Case, well penned!

There seems to be a lot of stardust floating around DU at the moment. You always inspire [&] push me, more than you're aware, Atakti. Thank you for continuous support and inspiration.

Enjoyed...each ending line of the stanzas..seem to resonate with me..and almost make there own poetic rendition...anyways--thanks for the read!

Thanks heaps for your great feedback, niknshell. I appreciate your kind words.

Perhaps we've been drinking from the same bottle... but the difference is case has got 2 big balls hanging from the last stanza.

Thanks heaps for reading PM.

LIZ thank you so much for your thoughts on this piece. I believe we write about the world from a similar perspective. I see it in your comments and feel it when I read your poetry.
 
You have deciphered the scattered bones of this poem, the elements, the energy and power that makes our worlds spin. This poem is exactly that, all the elements combined together, in unison, one power, in the infinite power of love.

Thanks Magdalena, I'm stoked you enjoyed this poem....     
    
Now, the []... you know I don't like to give away all my secrets, but because you asked so nicely, here goes.     
    
The [] first appeared in my poem "The beating of two hearts in an elevator [on the axis of heaven and hell]". It showed up in the title then it infiltrated certain words in the piece. For a while there the [] only appeared when a particular voice was being used, often my raw, harder, edgier and more brutal pieces were featuring []. Now, it seems the [] are infiltrating my love poems.     
    
The [] are used for various purposes, often this is left to the reader's interpretation. The [] are either used for highlighting certain words, thoughts, hidden messages, that I want to draw the readers attention to. Sometimes these words are [framed], indicating the need to emphasise the word during the reading [&] in other cases, if you were to remove the word it would give the line a double meaning... yes, sometimes the word is excessive [baggage]. Other times [it] just looks [fucking] cool.

I'm aware that other poets in DU have started using [] in their poems, some get [it], some don't and others just amuse me.   
     

uma... you're a legend!!! Thank you so much for your kick-ass critique. To receive such an awesome compliment and insightful perspectives from a poet your calibre is an honour.
     
I'm stoked you've singled out this poem, it's very special to me. I can still vividly remember the day I wrote it. I was sitting in my car next to the ocean, I was sleep deprived and I'd been reading a lot of love poems. I was contemplating love, true love, hot feverish passion and asked myself, what it would be like for a broken heart fall in love again. To make make this hypothesis even more complex, what if this love was a forbidden love in a small town?    
     
The title itself came after the poem was finished. I agree, it's rank with philosophy with a kick of science, but I will share that it has a close connection to the fire ablaze in the first stanza [the cause].... and what follows? Sometimes when love hits you, it swings back like a pendulum. This theory then led to more questions. What are the consequences of love and what happens during the period in between when we swing? Sometimes there's not enough time to think, so you go with the flow.    
     
Again, thank you so much for your thoughts and for adding this poem to your reading list.