Galactic Paroxysm

Ultimate unhinging of the Universe....a galactic apocalypse ....

This almost reads as a metaphor for our own end of days---armageddon. Your sci-fy pieces are among my favs, my friend---this being no exception!

Your unique surrealsitic imagery is incredible--
"Metal snowflakes spin down, ninja stars/from a judging sky. Venusian rain/is savior of none, but acid..."

Chilling, Atakti!

Why thank you, Dark Enchantress! It's more science than fiction, though. Extreme weather conditions on Venus and other planets - I saw an article and was inspired.
 
I did throw in some darkness, lol, no surprise there...

Thank you for the list add, I'm honored.

NICELY DONE!!! You rocked this one!

Red

 Thank ya, Red!  I aim to rock, not roll...

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Your comments are generous, Crim, thank you for that.

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Science offers us much, Kitty!

Thank you, pleased you like it.

...yes the Gauls and their peroxides ...ive heard many a tale, but this one captures the might of such things- ;-/
Thrilling Write Atakti ...makes me pine for my Asimov!!!

Soul, don't go throwing hefty names like that around! Thank you for the mighty comment.

Ha, so you noticed... I'll very likely be visiting more soon, and dragging you all with me.

Thanks very much, Vee, your words mean a lot, especially knowing your skills with the exotic ink.

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Polluted taints maxed in a visual bite. Sci-fi painter of the absurd in washes of worlds of hells...straight to my list.
Jake

Digging your epic comments, Jake, and thanks so much for the list add!

"sooted plunge
finds death in perdition's liquid core. "

just for that... AMAZING!

Yeah, that one took some tinkering... glad you like it, 13!

:)

i had a dream like this once.


it did'nt end well.....

a dream on repeat?..

surreal is a fitting descriptor for this. your stellar images are fascinating. science inspires art...

Science and nature hold endless fascination for countless artists... and so I'm on that list.

The greatest creative force is the universe being itself...

Thanks, John, for your comments, pleased you like this!

Sweet...your work always paints such great picturees!  Mike

Ah, cheers, Mike. And your comments are always so generous!

I sit around & imagine what the weather is like on other worlds all the time. The Universe is a violent thing. A most beautifully treacherous glimpse, Atakti...

you had me at "ninja stars"...

~bows~

Oh, thanks for that, Butch... Those ninja stars are just a lil sign of blood lust slipping through, quite apt for a violent, beautiful universe...

Atakti, this is a stella universe you've painted with a spray can and glitter.

That opening line was like a ninja star to the head and by the end I'm seeing flickering stars with lines that jump out like solar flares.

I love getting swept away in your descriptions, they're so beautifully intricate and yet powerful. Great work!!!

Wow, Case...

Your comments are overwhelmingly generous. I'm touched to see your cracking thoughts on the poem, and your adding it to your list.

It's a pleasure to see your rich feedback and perspective as the reader... I thank you.

Thank you, newbie! Welcome to DU.

A HUGE thank you to Case for the video and the reading!! I love it!

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Thanks for taking the time on this, I really appreciate it. It's perfect - and thanks for the music too! Computer bleeps and everything, it rocks!

Wow, gonna go watch it again...

this is wonderful...the write is concentrated and potent, as is most of your work.

It lends itself, and loves, the white of the page. And Case brought it into a rounder dimension . His production is very well layered, conceived, and realized... My only thought on this is that it is too short, and that is only because that realm that you write and he storyboards for, is big and immersive and I feel like I'm just truly pulled in and then it ends... A small thing, and a sign to me of this working well

Thank you, certainly look forward to where both of you diligent poets might go

Thank you for the detailed thoughts on this, lb, as well as the heads up towards our videos on the 'recite each other' thread - I appreciate it.

This is one of my poems that I enjoyed writing immensely, so when Case agreed to a trailer I knew it would elevate this write into a showpiece.

I see what you mean about short - on my side, no matter my efforts, the ink gets edited to precise brevity, as you noted, lol.

Thanks, lb!

This was super cool! Loved it my friend! :)

I'm so pleased you liked it, Poetik!

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It must be, if you say so, rM!

Thank you.

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SEXY...

I'm not sure of the focus of it, but it does have a dark well drawn out feel to it. It's creative,I think the voice effect takes a little away from it though.

Hope my feedback helped.