'Wanting'

I love this. The short extreme sentences are fantastic. Each word plays a part of beauty. Verbs are well placed, and seeting is great! Short and sweet too. Always good :)

reading it again, I have picked up on something. You have complimented each sentence with a contrast. Negative, Positive, Negative etc. Making something set like that, flow so well, is a true talent. Great job.

Had Jenna not pointed out the positive negative style, I fear I would have missed that! that is a creative touch. This is a beautiful work.

Thanks for the great comments!

I have never spoken to any other poets before so I don't know if my method of writing is normal! The words kind of just come to me....sometimes they run smoothly and other times I may get one line and it takes me a while to come up with the rest. This poem was written when I had a jumble of words on the screen of my laptop and words just kept jumping out at me and asking to be put together, soon enough they formed lines until I had this completed works. It's one of my favourites now.