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CRASHING CASTLES
to write beauty
into the lines
of everything
is foolish
it’s true
that fools are safe
and yet fools
fall hard
and i was a fool
i looked into your eyes
and imagined
that they saw me
i looked at your body
and the pounding
of a heart gone mad
spewed blood
through bursting veins
i loved you
and became a fool
with a fool’s
breaking heart
and yet with all the lies
my feelings told my brain
with all the castles
that are crashing down
around me
with all the dreams
you grind your feet into
as you walk away
there is beauty
so pure
that it hurts
you touched me
and your touch
was the calming
of a million raging storms
you touched me
and it meant
not a thing
to you
you said
you loved me
but your words
were just the things
you wrapped
your silence in
my words were strewn
like petals
between our souls
i threw them there eagerly
only to have them gathered
and flung aside
by you
(Photograph: Carlton at 17)
© Carlton Carr 2013
http://othervoices.blog.co.uk/
into the lines
of everything
is foolish
it’s true
that fools are safe
and yet fools
fall hard
and i was a fool
i looked into your eyes
and imagined
that they saw me
i looked at your body
and the pounding
of a heart gone mad
spewed blood
through bursting veins
i loved you
and became a fool
with a fool’s
breaking heart
and yet with all the lies
my feelings told my brain
with all the castles
that are crashing down
around me
with all the dreams
you grind your feet into
as you walk away
there is beauty
so pure
that it hurts
you touched me
and your touch
was the calming
of a million raging storms
you touched me
and it meant
not a thing
to you
you said
you loved me
but your words
were just the things
you wrapped
your silence in
my words were strewn
like petals
between our souls
i threw them there eagerly
only to have them gathered
and flung aside
by you
(Photograph: Carlton at 17)
© Carlton Carr 2013
http://othervoices.blog.co.uk/
Published 25th Oct 2013
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Anonymous
27th Oct 2013 5:15am
...everybody plays the fool, sometimes.
This was a great read. Really loved:
"my words were strewn
like petals
between our souls
i threw them there eagerly"
Sad beauty! Xo
Pen On~
This was a great read. Really loved:
"my words were strewn
like petals
between our souls
i threw them there eagerly"
Sad beauty! Xo
Pen On~
29th Oct 2013 10:57pm
Thank you for reading and commenting RainC - much appreciated and encouraging.
I am in awe at the beauty of your words and, the beauty in the art you display. The few words beneath the painting speaks the entire poem...
More profoundly, it speaks a thousand voices from one tongue and a lifetime of a multitude of experiences. Brilliant and clever! It takes courage to title a portrait "The Fool" as you have done; it demonstrates the depth of your talent and the honest approach that is your style.
I simply love Crashing Castles; a poem of a million emotions. To want and not be wanted, to give yet not receive, the angst, the disappointment, the betrayal, to yearn where there is no desire...
Compelling and heartfelt...oh so lovely!
More profoundly, it speaks a thousand voices from one tongue and a lifetime of a multitude of experiences. Brilliant and clever! It takes courage to title a portrait "The Fool" as you have done; it demonstrates the depth of your talent and the honest approach that is your style.
I simply love Crashing Castles; a poem of a million emotions. To want and not be wanted, to give yet not receive, the angst, the disappointment, the betrayal, to yearn where there is no desire...
Compelling and heartfelt...oh so lovely!
3rd Nov 2013 7:13am
Myheartbeats - τђє time and care you take to read and respond to my work is a huge compliment and edtremely encouraging for me. Your adding meto your reading list goes beyond any compliments. Thank you.