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bubbling
Drinking laudanum
with hints of clover
I stared into tin-cans
stringing a song
where the faintest of voices
whispered the word
~Jump~
This I swear
I heard
betwixt fiddle and verse
sending reaction
to a numbed
mumble of course
~Echoes~
Reverberate my mind
holding fast
the waves of time
splish-splashed
walking bay side
drowned in matters
~Bubbling
As I reach unto evening
sinking low
hand upon breast
beating
lacerated lashings whip
uncontrollably
~Thinking~
Jettison
ancient winds
swift tussle
barrel rolls, thunder
till finally
lightning struck
Promising
Now gone is never
pressed
pushed forever
to an edge where I can fly
blazing horizon line
there on the sunset
~Gliding
with hints of clover
I stared into tin-cans
stringing a song
where the faintest of voices
whispered the word
~Jump~
This I swear
I heard
betwixt fiddle and verse
sending reaction
to a numbed
mumble of course
~Echoes~
Reverberate my mind
holding fast
the waves of time
splish-splashed
walking bay side
drowned in matters
~Bubbling
As I reach unto evening
sinking low
hand upon breast
beating
lacerated lashings whip
uncontrollably
~Thinking~
Jettison
ancient winds
swift tussle
barrel rolls, thunder
till finally
lightning struck
Promising
Now gone is never
pressed
pushed forever
to an edge where I can fly
blazing horizon line
there on the sunset
~Gliding
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18th Oct 2013 00:55am
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Beautiful verses, written thoughts with many interpretations but mine is freedom from the past and flying towards a future. Good read Soul....fly on..look out for the tree...:-)
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18th Oct 2013 1:00am
Thanks for reading me Dear Grace!!!
Indeed Flying -Weaving through trees ;)
Indeed Flying -Weaving through trees ;)
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18th Oct 2013 2:32am
Thank You Dear Petit :)
those pesky nuances are just the cryptic keeps...Glad You felt the youth...we must keep hold of such things!!!
those pesky nuances are just the cryptic keeps...Glad You felt the youth...we must keep hold of such things!!!
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18th Oct 2013 2:54am
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18th Oct 2013 2:55am
I am flyin' high after reading this....helluva buzz in word, man...definitely one for the list...reminds me of a "very good night" on the mountainside, staring off across the valley, up where the winds are made of a peculiar magic, lost in the most pleasant of thoughts...
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18th Oct 2013 3:10am
Greatly appreciated Butcher-indeed the sights of flying high-thanks for flying along
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18th Oct 2013 2:14pm
Thank You Dear Queen...this was a tweak Write of my other post in a different direction to the same heading ;)
Re: bubbling
18th Oct 2013 2:34pm
same here as i said on the previous piece man. i'm really diggin the tighter gripped neat style.
saying more with less. letting the reader's mind do a bit more of the work is beneficial to the total ambiance of it all in the end....
well done brothaman...
keep on keepin on dawg...
saying more with less. letting the reader's mind do a bit more of the work is beneficial to the total ambiance of it all in the end....
well done brothaman...
keep on keepin on dawg...
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18th Oct 2013 4:16pm
Appreciated Sir...this was kind of a rework of the other...have to give credit...That approach i've been tinkering with for a while...copped it from Strider...He was a king of one word or minimalist Writes...very much a Haiku or Synru Approach...i get addicted to it...dont know his way of coming about it...but he was hitting it heavy for a while.
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18th Oct 2013 6:36pm
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The rhythm of this piece soothes and mesmerizes your words were stunning. :-)
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20th Oct 2013 1:46am
You are very Kind Dear Red :)
It is the circle effect (rhythm wise:)
(in my mind)-glad it coneyed
It is the circle effect (rhythm wise:)
(in my mind)-glad it coneyed
Re: bubbling
20th Oct 2013 2:22am
like the use of the bolded words to break up the poem--makes it so approachable to readers! :)
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20th Oct 2013 2:35am
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22nd Oct 2013 00:55am
Glide to wherever Soul, very clever piece of ink indeed, loved it a lot man.
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