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Silver Blurs
A slice of silver blurs by
then another — rhythmic,
relentless, elusive release.
Beyond the air bursts,
a murk of sands
withholds epiphanies.
Within echoed silence
is a newer home of
alien dimensions,
where each breath
is the erroneous step
propelling me forward.
One day, I'll stay into
night, relinquish all
retreats into reality.
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Re: Silver Blurs
12th Oct 2013 8:09pm
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12th Oct 2013 8:32pm
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Re: Silver Blurs
12th Oct 2013 10:26pm
i like how you portray the place you reside as somewhere far out and reality is the slip or the visit and especially that the step forward is "erroneous". love that word and i'm glad it is not used that often but well placed here.
i could be completely off the wall here but.....
i dig it miss A.
keep on keepin on....
i could be completely off the wall here but.....
i dig it miss A.
keep on keepin on....
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re: Re: Silver Blurs
13th Oct 2013 1:19pm
Johnrot your eye is sharp. That is the heart of the poem, the rest is window dressing.
Thank you!
Thank you!
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re: Re: Silver Blurs
13th Oct 2013 1:21pm
Thank you, Crim! Something is drawing the reader there, and the writer too...
:)
:)
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re: Re: Silver Blurs
13th Oct 2013 1:24pm
Well, someone let the catfish out of the bag *cough, turtle, cough*
But yeah, there is something hypotic about air bubbles...
Thanks for commenting, Petit.
:)
But yeah, there is something hypotic about air bubbles...
Thanks for commenting, Petit.
:)
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re: Re: Silver Blurs
13th Oct 2013 1:29pm
Too true, Vee, too true. I may have to revisit this work and look around this reality some more.
Thank you.
Thank you.
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re: Re: Silver Blurs
13th Oct 2013 1:30pm
*grin* waves will catch my attention, and yours, Mourganna!
Thank you for the lovely comment.
Thank you for the lovely comment.
Re: Silver Blurs
This is Silver Cool!!!
I read this again today and I have the opposite interpretation... you've got the hots for TRON!!!
Awesome poem, Atakti. I love the imagery of the murk sand and alien dimensions... have you read House of Leaves? You got me thinking about it.
Stupendous simplicity with so much depth, you make me sick.
I read this again today and I have the opposite interpretation... you've got the hots for TRON!!!
Awesome poem, Atakti. I love the imagery of the murk sand and alien dimensions... have you read House of Leaves? You got me thinking about it.
Stupendous simplicity with so much depth, you make me sick.
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re: Re: Silver Blurs
13th Oct 2013 8:07pm
Tron... You high on paint fumes?
House of Leaves - I looked it up, and it sounds like a book I should read. So thanks? Unless this is a book about confusion - aha!
Well, thanks for stopping by, and here's a bucket...
House of Leaves - I looked it up, and it sounds like a book I should read. So thanks? Unless this is a book about confusion - aha!
Well, thanks for stopping by, and here's a bucket...
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15th Oct 2013 6:53pm