Elysian Shores

Atakti. I'm shit with poetic autopsies and would
love to offer you something more constructive
than this, but.  What a great little piece..
Not as small as it would seem.


V

You're right, V, a whole lot going on here. I'm so glad you commented, now I can thank you for the list add!

Please visit anytime...

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great title for this homage to that sanctum where the heart is kept...

Thank you for the eloquent comment, John.

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Ah, Vee, thank you for the love.

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A sigh or two from a fellow poet... ahhh. Thank you, Gabriel.

Understanding is craved just because it is so necessary.  Your ability to fight injustice is in tandem with your need for "just us."  It is not too much to ask, to need, to demand, to hope, to desire, the us that is just.

Turtle, your wisdom has no limits, it seems. Thank you for your words.

Excellent. Just excellent.

Thank you, just thank you!

You saw harmony and chaos... wow. Thank you for your unique insights, as always, Mourganna.

I had to google the title (dunce cap firmly fitted) and have to agree with everyone else who said it, the naming of this one is genius it only clicked into place after I knew what the title meant. It brings on a very, very strong sense of longing, and the last two lines bring with them the emotions I would struggle to fit into a mammoth write. Can I get a hallelujah?

P.s this is becoming unfair to other writers. My reading list is practically all you and Hemi now .s

Hallelujah, Brother Dys!

Thanks, man, always dig your comments.

A masterpiece...wow ! you have to love poetry to feel the deepness of this lines.  awesome work!!

Well, if you felt depth, then you must love poetry, Cesar C.

Thank you for your comment, and welcome to DU!

I read this poem last week, sometimes it's nice let the words wash over and then come back to it. Then it really sinks in....  
 
I understand.  
 
There's so much complexity in your simplicity. I could write pages of poetry and strip it back, and struggle to find so much, in so few words. You inspire me in so many ways.  
 
It's a beautiful piece, Atakti.

Thank you, Case. You are generous with feedback, as normal.

Also, thanks for adding it to your reading list, means a lot.

heavy! very!

So it is, depends which planet it's read on, really.

no no... on Jupiter the words would collapse on themselves, along with us.