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Could use some help
I don't know where I'm going with this
and I don't know why I wrote it it holds no truth.
wondering if anyone can make some sense of it make it their own idk just a thought
tattooed your name across my heart
for a fleeting look
a breath of my name upon your lips
instead you gave me
the white noise
of fingernails scraping it's chalkboard
!!!
That's that lol
and I don't know why I wrote it it holds no truth.
wondering if anyone can make some sense of it make it their own idk just a thought
tattooed your name across my heart
for a fleeting look
a breath of my name upon your lips
instead you gave me
the white noise
of fingernails scraping it's chalkboard
!!!
That's that lol
Published 12th Sep 2013
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12th Sep 2013 5:18am
I tattooed your name
across my heart
for a fleeting look,
a breath
of my name
upon your lips,
but, instead,
you gave me
the white noise
of fingernails
scraping across
a flat surface;
it's a chalkboard
I loved you,
and it became to you
just an academic question.
across my heart
for a fleeting look,
a breath
of my name
upon your lips,
but, instead,
you gave me
the white noise
of fingernails
scraping across
a flat surface;
it's a chalkboard
I loved you,
and it became to you
just an academic question.
12th Sep 2013 12:21pm
Anonymous
- Edited 17th May 2018 7:36pm
12th Sep 2013 5:20am
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12th Sep 2013 12:23pm
I think I'm going to actually scrap the entire thing! maybe I'll save some of it Ty kindly sir xoxo
Anonymous
- Edited 16th May 2018 10:05pm
12th Sep 2013 10:17am
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12th Sep 2013 12:23pm
12th Sep 2013 11:37am
i like the concept gg.
especially the 2nd stanza.
a lil elaboration i think would do us all well tho.
anyway i still dig it lady..
especially the 2nd stanza.
a lil elaboration i think would do us all well tho.
anyway i still dig it lady..
12th Sep 2013 12:24pm
Anonymous
- Edited 14th Nov 2018 6:35pm
12th Sep 2013 4:26pm
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12th Sep 2013 5:55pm
12th Sep 2013 7:32pm
Stop Trying To 'Make Sense' - 'sense' the way we're conditioned to think of it, is anathema to creativity....it leads ye to dig a very prosaic hole into ground deep under banality -
so sayeth the Lord
so sayeth the Lord
12th Sep 2013 9:00pm
Anonymous
- Edited 11th Jun 2019 9:40pm
13th Sep 2013 6:20am
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14th Sep 2013 6:24am
14th Sep 2013 6:36am
Well I hate looking like a copycat... After tire wrote an entire piece, it was a buzz kill becuz I instantly saw something to work with lol anyways, the beginning is an excellent setup for a variety of directions :)
14th Sep 2013 6:41am
I like the beginning best I wanna scratch the rest off I may just do that . Idk by next week if I can't fix it, it'll be tossed Ty for your timexoxo
17th Sep 2013 00:28am
Reads like a heartbreak song by one of my favorite bands, Sade. I can hear the sax now. Runningturtle's ending works.
17th Sep 2013 1:20pm
Anonymous
- Edited 14th May 2018 10:07pm
24th Oct 2013 10:45pm
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24th Oct 2013 10:51pm