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Haiku XXVI
Like a shooting star
Fooling with the milky way
I feel at your side[font=Times New Roman][/font]
Fooling with the milky way
I feel at your side[font=Times New Roman][/font]
Published 8th Sep 2013
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Anonymous
- Edited 14th May 2018 10:07pm
8th Sep 2013 5:05pm
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Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 00:16am
8th Sep 2013 5:26pm
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8th Sep 2013 5:41pm
8th Sep 2013 8:55pm
Is the third line intended to read "FEEL at your side" (sensual overtone)or "FELL at your side" (usually associated with shooting stars that come to earth)?
It is indeed intended to read "feel" since it's the sequel to the first line. Though "fell" is possible and good, too, it's not intended here because somehow negatively connotated. But it is an interestig toehold!
Thank you for your profound comments, new interpretations and your open mind.
Thank you for your profound comments, new interpretations and your open mind.
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 00:09am
8th Sep 2013 9:12pm
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I tried to express how I feel with (and why I fell for) my husband :-). The sensual note is clearly ostensible :-). Thank you, as always, for your encouraging and kind comments, Carlene!
8th Sep 2013 10:28pm
8th Sep 2013 10:34pm