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For Sophie * Tá buille nua le mo chroí, agus is breá liom é
My darling
it's almost like you robbed the gods
of all their beauty
when you passed through their nebulae
on your way to bless us
this world lost some of its shadows
the moment you screamed out your first thoughts
and brought the tears from your mother's eyes
and princess
it was no surprise for me
to feel your tiny hand wrap around my finger
but when I whispered your name
and your eyes opened briefly
to compliment the small curled up smile
that came, then lingered for a poet's lifetime
you took the breath of me
but in reality, I'd have gladly given it anyway
girl
when you're a little older
we'll both hunt hidden treasures
that fill pages
and we'll spend an age finding out what happened next
to this one or that one
or jump on a ship that's on its way
past suns and moons
but Sophie
when it rains, and all you feel is wet
remember you've me for shelter
and all the other hearts
that beat a little bit harder from the sight of you
or better yet
we'll both go stamping in the puddles
and we'll shout at the grey clouds
then I'll put you sitting on my shoulders
so the sun can hear us
when we call it out to play
and finally
please promise me, you'll always be Sophie
never less than who you are
no matter who it is that begs it of you
you're no one's trophy, nor should you ever be
or ever feel a hand strike in anger
or walk blindly
while you have me to guide you
because I can swear an oath with ease
that these two hands that hold you
will plough through any man, beast or god
should you need them to
*There's a new beat to my heart, and I love it
it's almost like you robbed the gods
of all their beauty
when you passed through their nebulae
on your way to bless us
this world lost some of its shadows
the moment you screamed out your first thoughts
and brought the tears from your mother's eyes
and princess
it was no surprise for me
to feel your tiny hand wrap around my finger
but when I whispered your name
and your eyes opened briefly
to compliment the small curled up smile
that came, then lingered for a poet's lifetime
you took the breath of me
but in reality, I'd have gladly given it anyway
girl
when you're a little older
we'll both hunt hidden treasures
that fill pages
and we'll spend an age finding out what happened next
to this one or that one
or jump on a ship that's on its way
past suns and moons
but Sophie
when it rains, and all you feel is wet
remember you've me for shelter
and all the other hearts
that beat a little bit harder from the sight of you
or better yet
we'll both go stamping in the puddles
and we'll shout at the grey clouds
then I'll put you sitting on my shoulders
so the sun can hear us
when we call it out to play
and finally
please promise me, you'll always be Sophie
never less than who you are
no matter who it is that begs it of you
you're no one's trophy, nor should you ever be
or ever feel a hand strike in anger
or walk blindly
while you have me to guide you
because I can swear an oath with ease
that these two hands that hold you
will plough through any man, beast or god
should you need them to
*There's a new beat to my heart, and I love it
Written by
lepperochan
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Published 23rd Aug 2013
| Edited 4th Sep 2013
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nua le mo chroí, agus is breá liom é )
23rd Aug 2013 00:58am
simple here mate. very beautiful and heartfelt, laid well enough to indulge in pure sentiment. Loved it man, and congrats!
"then lingered for a poet's lifetime"
yes sir, just awfully adorable, and sincere and strong enough to stand it up tall.
further note, should ya have a lady friend good with the thread and needle, you should embroider that into a blanket or something, have those protective and adoring words wrapped around her
"then lingered for a poet's lifetime"
yes sir, just awfully adorable, and sincere and strong enough to stand it up tall.
further note, should ya have a lady friend good with the thread and needle, you should embroider that into a blanket or something, have those protective and adoring words wrapped around her
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23rd Aug 2013 1:23am
oh Barron of light
Thanks man, I've been attempting this since Monday, tried a few different angles, complex, too clever for my own good type stuff, but I wanted something that read special to me and simple done the trick.
I can see maybe a bit of excess rhyme might have to be tamed and maybe a couple of lines can be cut/ shortened but I'm happy enough and happier that it can give off what I'm feeling.
I thank you good sir, for taking the time to read this, it's a lot longer than my normal, and for laying your thoughts down.
That's a good idea 'bout the embroidery, lot of words there , it'll take a bit of charming
Thanks man, I've been attempting this since Monday, tried a few different angles, complex, too clever for my own good type stuff, but I wanted something that read special to me and simple done the trick.
I can see maybe a bit of excess rhyme might have to be tamed and maybe a couple of lines can be cut/ shortened but I'm happy enough and happier that it can give off what I'm feeling.
I thank you good sir, for taking the time to read this, it's a lot longer than my normal, and for laying your thoughts down.
That's a good idea 'bout the embroidery, lot of words there , it'll take a bit of charming
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23rd Aug 2013 1:25am
why thank you Petit one, shivers is as good a reaction as any :)
thank you kindly dear lady for dropping by and leaving your footprint
thank you kindly dear lady for dropping by and leaving your footprint
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23rd Aug 2013 1:52am
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23rd Aug 2013 2:52am
Maggie
why yes, yes she is :)
delighted to have you drop by missus G ,cheers for the kind words
why yes, yes she is :)
delighted to have you drop by missus G ,cheers for the kind words
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23rd Aug 2013 3:00am
Strider
Humbled it is I am to have teased so many good words from your fingertips.
ah yes, trials and errors both my friend, which in effect gives me more experienced thoughts to lend the tiny ears in question, and mend any broken feelings when the time comes. :)
good to see you here man, thanks for the words
Humbled it is I am to have teased so many good words from your fingertips.
ah yes, trials and errors both my friend, which in effect gives me more experienced thoughts to lend the tiny ears in question, and mend any broken feelings when the time comes. :)
good to see you here man, thanks for the words
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23rd Aug 2013 3:15am
Hemi
I'm so very grateful for your advice on the idea of this (or lack thereof). as you know, I was quite lost in the swell of it all. clearly you should be bottled and distributed worldwide, and it should be called Hemi's Head. (though I fear the gay community might get the wrong idea ..or even start a new technique)
either way man, many thanks for everything, and for dropping by and leaving your thoughts
I'm so very grateful for your advice on the idea of this (or lack thereof). as you know, I was quite lost in the swell of it all. clearly you should be bottled and distributed worldwide, and it should be called Hemi's Head. (though I fear the gay community might get the wrong idea ..or even start a new technique)
either way man, many thanks for everything, and for dropping by and leaving your thoughts
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23rd Aug 2013 3:40am
Steve
I agree about the oh at the start, definitely overkill there, so its been unceremoniously wrenched out and thrown to the slag heap.
haha, I'll give you an idea 'bout the mixed feelings I've been having. the doors to the maternity ward were locked from the inside so you buzz and a nurse releases the lock.
I got there one night after 12am knowing no nurse was gonna buzz me in and hoping some visitor would do it manually for me. when a visitor did it, I thanked him, then went into a rant about safety and how his act of kindness could have cost a terrible price.
..yeah, I know :)
anyway man, I appreciate your words and the time you take constantly to help and encourage me and folk in general.
so thank you kindly good sir
I agree about the oh at the start, definitely overkill there, so its been unceremoniously wrenched out and thrown to the slag heap.
haha, I'll give you an idea 'bout the mixed feelings I've been having. the doors to the maternity ward were locked from the inside so you buzz and a nurse releases the lock.
I got there one night after 12am knowing no nurse was gonna buzz me in and hoping some visitor would do it manually for me. when a visitor did it, I thanked him, then went into a rant about safety and how his act of kindness could have cost a terrible price.
..yeah, I know :)
anyway man, I appreciate your words and the time you take constantly to help and encourage me and folk in general.
so thank you kindly good sir
Re: For Sophie *Níl buille nua le mo chroí, agus is breá liom é
23rd Aug 2013 3:53am
I have always sensed that marshmallow core of yours. This gave me chills to see this extra beat of your heart penned out so beautifully. Sophie is one lucky little girl to have you, Eamonn. Congrats again!
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23rd Aug 2013 4:19am
Rachel me ol' flower
no you have not ..or you may have thought you did, 'cos this marsh-mellow core is a passing phase ..yes that's it ..passing phase :)
It's me that's the lucky one really, I mean god, the age of me and I already have the start of another generation to watch and help grow up.
Thank you kindly for dropping by dear lady, and for the good words
no you have not ..or you may have thought you did, 'cos this marsh-mellow core is a passing phase ..yes that's it ..passing phase :)
It's me that's the lucky one really, I mean god, the age of me and I already have the start of another generation to watch and help grow up.
Thank you kindly for dropping by dear lady, and for the good words
Re: For Sophie *Níl buille nua le mo chroí, agus is breá liom é
23rd Aug 2013 4:38am
Nice gentle write that tugs on the heart strings. It’s a different tone from some of your other work I’ve been reading, have enjoyed your work.
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23rd Aug 2013 5:24am
Thank you for stopping by and leaving the kind words Dirtfarm, and welcome to this place good sir.
Re: For Sophie *Níl buille nua le mo chroí, agus is breá liom é
23rd Aug 2013 10:04am
Beautiful, sweet. You'll just have to live with those words, because obviously Sophie is having that effect on you...
:)
:)
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23rd Aug 2013 2:19pm
Atakti
I s'pose I can let them two words slip this once, but please don't make a habit of them, it's just the initial reaction you see, by next week I'll be back to grumpy fucker that hates stuff.
thanks for dropping by and leaving your footprint dear Lady
I s'pose I can let them two words slip this once, but please don't make a habit of them, it's just the initial reaction you see, by next week I'll be back to grumpy fucker that hates stuff.
thanks for dropping by and leaving your footprint dear Lady
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23rd Aug 2013 2:24pm
ahh DP, you honour me with your foul language and kind words.
delighted to have stirred joy within your black black heart :D
'cue kindly good sir
delighted to have stirred joy within your black black heart :D
'cue kindly good sir
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24th Aug 2013 2:44am
Kezia, thanks man, wow is as good a word as any to hear, though I'm glad you decided to continue anyway. belated welcomes to you
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24th Aug 2013 2:55am
Jesta
god, you swear with such conviction it warms the heart. must be the Scott air, I expect you'll be deep frying mars bars in batter before the years end.
stoked to have you come visit my little corner, Miss.
many thanks for the words
god, you swear with such conviction it warms the heart. must be the Scott air, I expect you'll be deep frying mars bars in batter before the years end.
stoked to have you come visit my little corner, Miss.
many thanks for the words
Re: For Sophie
23rd Aug 2013 8:03pm
very cool daddy poem....
comes
across big-loving but no way
sappy as most stuff like that wrote by daddies.
deal on, daddyo
comes
across big-loving but no way
sappy as most stuff like that wrote by daddies.
deal on, daddyo
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24th Aug 2013 3:05am
Danny Bhoy
Thank you kindly good sir, t'was however I should point out written by a dad for a granddaughter.
yes, I can hear cups of coffees falling out of hands in shock all over the globe, it's true; I am now a granddad
( the author of this comment realizes that he may just be the coolest Granddad like ever but doesn't want to blow his own horn...)
cheers for the drop by Dan, and for leaving your thought print
Thank you kindly good sir, t'was however I should point out written by a dad for a granddaughter.
yes, I can hear cups of coffees falling out of hands in shock all over the globe, it's true; I am now a granddad
( the author of this comment realizes that he may just be the coolest Granddad like ever but doesn't want to blow his own horn...)
cheers for the drop by Dan, and for leaving your thought print
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25th Aug 2013 12:34pm
hard to tell from yr pxtr 'ow olde ye mighta be.
but
what th'ell, wee're only as olde as our certificates of birth,
right?
but
what th'ell, wee're only as olde as our certificates of birth,
right?
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25th Aug 2013 5:31am
Beautiful, Lepp, absolutely beautiful. Thanks for the peek into your soul.
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25th Aug 2013 8:55pm
Tony
glad you feel it man, a peek is all you get though, I'd not want to be responsible for scarring your retinas.
cheers for the drop-by, man, and for the kind words
glad you feel it man, a peek is all you get though, I'd not want to be responsible for scarring your retinas.
cheers for the drop-by, man, and for the kind words
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Mo cara,
I somehow, always suspected, that within the chest of the bad,'burly beast' beat a truly tender heart.....
A delicately lovely scribe, to be certain,Eamonn...such a touching, thoughtful gift to your granddaughter.
Congrats!!
I somehow, always suspected, that within the chest of the bad,'burly beast' beat a truly tender heart.....
A delicately lovely scribe, to be certain,Eamonn...such a touching, thoughtful gift to your granddaughter.
Congrats!!
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26th Aug 2013 00:29am
Go raibh maith agat as do cineáltas, Enchantress
ah, we'll say no more 'bout any tenderness that might be apparent, thank you :)
Thanks for dropping by and leaving your thoughts
ah, we'll say no more 'bout any tenderness that might be apparent, thank you :)
Thanks for dropping by and leaving your thoughts
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30th Aug 2013 5:56am
I'm going to write like you one day. And when I do I'll believe you when you say shine on!! Lol great I mean very good write dear leprechaun. Xoxo cz
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30th Aug 2013 6:25am
ahh gigi me ol' flower
on the one hand you're far too kind to me and on the other far too unkind to yourself.
first time you write like me, I'll stop reading you damnit.
I do appreciate all your support and encouragement since like forever and thank you kindly for dropping by and leaving your thoughts.
..shine on :)
on the one hand you're far too kind to me and on the other far too unkind to yourself.
first time you write like me, I'll stop reading you damnit.
I do appreciate all your support and encouragement since like forever and thank you kindly for dropping by and leaving your thoughts.
..shine on :)
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4th Sep 2013 8:30pm
OP
really good of you to drop by and express yourself. let there be no delusions of keeping any form up, I got lucky is all, on a couple of levels
always happy to be an inspiration, thank you kindly.
really good of you to drop by and express yourself. let there be no delusions of keeping any form up, I got lucky is all, on a couple of levels
always happy to be an inspiration, thank you kindly.
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12th Sep 2013 6:06pm
Aish
..is it really you? or is this some cruel joke being played by the universe
Thank you kindly dear Lady, figured on the whispering in a couple of weeks, first things first "say Graanpaaaw"
delighted to see you knocking about, Aish. hope you stay a bit, thanks for dropping by and leaving your thoughts
..is it really you? or is this some cruel joke being played by the universe
Thank you kindly dear Lady, figured on the whispering in a couple of weeks, first things first "say Graanpaaaw"
delighted to see you knocking about, Aish. hope you stay a bit, thanks for dropping by and leaving your thoughts
aww........
Anonymous
26th Sep 2013 8:27am
Umm....I'm shocked you wrote something so incredibly beautiful and heart melting! Kinda' presumptuous of me to even think. I mean, I've read your talent, even the detailed assessment you give in critique, but showing your softer side is truly a gorgeous thing for ME to behold. Xo
Poetic Love~
Poetic Love~
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12th Mar 2014 2:38pm
jaysus, anyone would think I'm normally a heartless, sarcastic bastard :)
sorry I missed this, Rain. Thank you for dropping by and taking the time to type the wonderful words you've left
..I've no soft side, hard as nails I am
sorry I missed this, Rain. Thank you for dropping by and taking the time to type the wonderful words you've left
..I've no soft side, hard as nails I am
Re: For Sophie * Tá buille nua le mo chroí, agus is breá liom é
11th Mar 2014 10:00pm
gotta commend you for this exquisite piece ov beauty. actually had me on the verge ov tears, it was that good. youre already one ov my new favourite poets. please keep up it up. id love to see you get an award for your thoughts. cheers!
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12th Mar 2014 2:47pm
Satyr
welcome to this place good sir
thank you kindly for your commendation, and cor coming here to check out my stuff.
ah, I'd imagine awards wouldn't come close to the kind rewards one gets from people here, unless its a substantial financial award, then you can all go fuck yourselves, :)
welcome to this place good sir
thank you kindly for your commendation, and cor coming here to check out my stuff.
ah, I'd imagine awards wouldn't come close to the kind rewards one gets from people here, unless its a substantial financial award, then you can all go fuck yourselves, :)
RE: Tá buille nua le mo chroí, agus is breá liom é
25th Apr 2014 3:30am
Go raibh maith agat as an fhilíocht iontach.
I'm not sure if that's correct as I used Google Translate, but just in case, here is the original message: "Thank you for this amazing poetry".
I'm not sure if that's correct as I used Google Translate, but just in case, here is the original message: "Thank you for this amazing poetry".
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27th Apr 2014 1:47pm
Narocia
welcome to this place.
Gaelic doesn't really translate into English very well at the best of times but you've not done too bad at all, I'd probably change 'as an' to sna, fair play good fellow, and thank you for the visit and kind words
welcome to this place.
Gaelic doesn't really translate into English very well at the best of times but you've not done too bad at all, I'd probably change 'as an' to sna, fair play good fellow, and thank you for the visit and kind words
Re: For Sophie * Tá buille nua le mo chroí, agus is breá liom é
Eamon, I stumbled across this gem in a reading list and was totally blown away. A father's love for a daughter or granddaughter is one of vulnerability, instinctive and protective, and you find yourself overwhelmed by these emotions the instant you hold that child in your arms. I guess it's the closest a father will ever get to understanding a mothers's emotional bond towards her child.
You've captured the raw emotions perfectly, enough to make me smile and appreciate how lucky I am to have a daughter. This poem is timeless, beautifully written and a gift to your granddaughter the day she can comprehend how in an instant, she changed the lives around her.
You've captured the raw emotions perfectly, enough to make me smile and appreciate how lucky I am to have a daughter. This poem is timeless, beautifully written and a gift to your granddaughter the day she can comprehend how in an instant, she changed the lives around her.
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9th Aug 2014 10:54pm
Case
spot on, man. actually I had terrible trouble translating the rush of emotions into words, luckily I had a friend at hand who calmed shit down for me.
understanding anything about women is a task best left for other women :)
thanks for the drop by good sir, and the words
spot on, man. actually I had terrible trouble translating the rush of emotions into words, luckily I had a friend at hand who calmed shit down for me.
understanding anything about women is a task best left for other women :)
thanks for the drop by good sir, and the words