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I Salute the devil I rejected
My heart was built for two.
Empty as a promise no more. I think of you often.
For once I meant what I said.
Your alibis, innocent smiles.
I was assaulted by your love.
Those sad lying eyes.
Head like a hole, 'cause I've had a few.
I'm looking like the devil I rejected.
Each time I run, someone stands in my way.
I turn from the mirror, n' salute the devil I rejected.
Empty as a promise no more. I think of you often.
For once I meant what I said.
Your alibis, innocent smiles.
I was assaulted by your love.
Those sad lying eyes.
Head like a hole, 'cause I've had a few.
I'm looking like the devil I rejected.
Each time I run, someone stands in my way.
I turn from the mirror, n' salute the devil I rejected.
Published 22nd Aug 2013
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22nd Aug 2013 00:57am
This packs a big punch for a little poem. That last line paints a very deep and vivid picture. I think the first stanza should be four lines instead of three though, and I can't figure out if the spacing in the beggining of lines is intentional or just formatting errors? JMHO. I enjoyed the read very much, nice one! :)
22nd Aug 2013 1:31am
Thanks for the comments.
I just wrote it that way n' that's how it came.
I read a few of your older works n' I can totally relate to what some of your words mean.
Kg.
I just wrote it that way n' that's how it came.
I read a few of your older works n' I can totally relate to what some of your words mean.
Kg.
22nd Aug 2013 6:59am
Man I felt like I was reading the words to a Don Henley song! My favorite line is the last one...
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22nd Aug 2013 3:13pm
Yes, that was one of his early solo hits from his second album. Then you can't forget his contributions to the Eagles.
22nd Aug 2013 4:17pm
That's right Jazz.
I can recall listening to the Eagles when I was younger.
Mom was more of a Commodores head. She loved Lionel Ritchie.
Thanks for the great comments.
Kg
I can recall listening to the Eagles when I was younger.
Mom was more of a Commodores head. She loved Lionel Ritchie.
Thanks for the great comments.
Kg
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24th Aug 2013 3:56am
Wheni wrote it i never expected to keep it.to end as short as it is
I think it i was trying something new for me n'my style.
I think it i was trying something new for me n'my style.
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2nd Oct 2013 8:54pm
Hi there Hiba, all is well.
Im doing really well, just had a wee bit of s lull with my inking. Everything is good with me. How are you ,
Im doing really well, just had a wee bit of s lull with my inking. Everything is good with me. How are you ,