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But that's when I used to be...
i felt like a slinky, as she moved closer into me
there was a spring in the step, inside i felt so free
i heard the pattering of the heart's rhythmic beat
i was so afraid to stand, yet even more to sit
becuz she would only knock me out my seat
and i trusted she knew just how perfectly we fit
i smelled affection dripping from her every pore
and who can say what it was , but after one sweet kiss
you can trust, i'd die for another taste of her once more
you see emotions, flowed as she opened me up to this
when i feeling like that lil slinky, from her digging me
and i aspired to spread my wings as her sweetness
once sprung me free, but that was when I used to be...
there was a spring in the step, inside i felt so free
i heard the pattering of the heart's rhythmic beat
i was so afraid to stand, yet even more to sit
becuz she would only knock me out my seat
and i trusted she knew just how perfectly we fit
i smelled affection dripping from her every pore
and who can say what it was , but after one sweet kiss
you can trust, i'd die for another taste of her once more
you see emotions, flowed as she opened me up to this
when i feeling like that lil slinky, from her digging me
and i aspired to spread my wings as her sweetness
once sprung me free, but that was when I used to be...
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14th Aug 2013 5:16pm
Aaaawww Red! Thank you so much for the big
smile u just gave me :) appreciate u always
smile u just gave me :) appreciate u always
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14th Aug 2013 5:19pm
Thanks Anita, it could've easily have been a hate filled tirade
but I decided against that lol
but I decided against that lol
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Anonymous
14th Aug 2013 6:30pm
This was too sweet, Poet! :)
I really enjoyed reading this! Xo
Pen Love~
I really enjoyed reading this! Xo
Pen Love~
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re: Re: But that's when I used to be...
14th Aug 2013 6:53pm
I'm grateful to you as always my sweet Rain
your friendship n support 'lifts' me :)
your friendship n support 'lifts' me :)
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14th Aug 2013 10:02pm
Hope you still exist, dear! But as your sweet lines indicate you're possibly in the process of being dissolved :-). Nice write, my friend! Enjoyed it!
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16th Aug 2013 3:44am
Well thank u... Without a doubt though this lost has affected me alot.. Appreciate u always my friend :)
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Re: But that's when I used to be...
16th Aug 2013 2:38pm
this was simply Beautiful and the ending was Superb!!! i really enjoyed
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16th Aug 2013 4:36pm
You're such a wonderful friend n supporter
I can't even thank you enough for ur sweet support!
:) happy u find my ink worth ur time :)
I can't even thank you enough for ur sweet support!
:) happy u find my ink worth ur time :)