Flavored Kiss

Good stuff. Very enjoyable to read and a lot of energy here. Have you considered paring it down a little bit? The poem's energy seems to be centered around the you, and that's essentially what you've promised in your conclusion, though maybe this could be converted into a title or moved to the top to be the first section. For example, I read the first strope, but I feel only:

                   I let you down
                   you slither down
                   to my belly

This strope could also potentially be moved to the end, where the coffee seems to "linger further." Naturally, I think the my's in the poem will wane, though I wouldn't get rid of all of them. I would get rid of the last stanza entirely though. I think the poem is strong enough on its own to convey this afterthought through enactment and presence. Very enjoyable to read. Thanks.

I would take you're suggestions into consideration if i have time to edit... i really appreciate the nice comment though thank you so much!:)

Excellent deception. You drew me in and then left me wondering which is better..coffe is a close second.

nice, thank you!

Love it girl! :)

thanks doll :)

Funny how you mock at the audience with this piece. I was beginning to get jealous until I realised you were doing it with a "cup of coffee"

cheers my friend! thankss :)

yay, long live the coffee lovers! thanks Jacki! :)

how much you love your coffee.  But I remember liking this poem.  

I guess the secret's out?

yup, somebody gave away my secret identity, but it's ok... thnksss!!!

Haha, sorry! I either helped or flat out gave it away. My bad...:P Great poem, as always. Wild-Tidal Nymph-Cherry. :D

no, you did nothing wrong... Wild-Tidal Nymph-Cherry
--ooohhh i soo love that! thanks Jade! :)

I'm sitting here drinking this cup of coffee about to orgasm..lol

Lol! nice, but seriously coffee is sexy! thankss :)

thanksss! glad that you liked it :)

go get some :) thanks doll!

great idea....

thanks! :)