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I love to see you laugh
I love too see you smile
All while wondering the whole while
I'd hate to see you cry
I'd love to see you stay
Never to leave never to go
Always wanting you to be mine
For eternity and beyond
I want you on by mi side
With out you i'll surely die
I love too see you smile
All while wondering the whole while
I'd hate to see you cry
I'd love to see you stay
Never to leave never to go
Always wanting you to be mine
For eternity and beyond
I want you on by mi side
With out you i'll surely die
Published 13th Jul 2013
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- Edited 16th May 2018 5:35pm
13th Aug 2013 2:11am
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14th Aug 2013 7:39pm
'All while wondering the whole while' too many whiles ?
Last line 'with out I shall surely die' you have already mentioned you in the previous line Be careful with abbreviation (I'll etc)
Do not be offended I like the poem
1st Oct 2013 8:17pm
i like this poem it is ratehr intersting shows how most of us who have been in love felt at some point in the relationship.
