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IN VAIN
(visual poem)
Beaten up beyond fatigue
By constant thrusts of grey
She bleeds her pale light
Spills her last drop in fear
Before being overtaken
Merciless
By the masters of tonight
Beaten up beyond fatigue
By constant thrusts of grey
She bleeds her pale light
Spills her last drop in fear
Before being overtaken
Merciless
By the masters of tonight
Published 23rd Jun 2013
| Edited 25th Jun 2013
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Anonymous
- Edited 14th Nov 2018 6:35pm
23rd Jun 2013 3:53pm
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23rd Jun 2013 8:09pm
23rd Jun 2013 6:52pm
Intriguing...Sad....Lovely. This piece presents such an unexpected concept of how the Moon Goddess is usually presented.
Somehow,at least for me, she is invariably portrayed as the ruler of her night world...but, your poem definitely puts a creative,symbolic, more sinister spin on this entire idea.
("...Before being overtaken/merciless/by the Masters of Tonight")--Chilling!!
Your amazing imagery...both visual, and written, are what makes this outstanding.
Thank you for sharing your gift(s) with us!
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
Somehow,at least for me, she is invariably portrayed as the ruler of her night world...but, your poem definitely puts a creative,symbolic, more sinister spin on this entire idea.
("...Before being overtaken/merciless/by the Masters of Tonight")--Chilling!!
Your amazing imagery...both visual, and written, are what makes this outstanding.
Thank you for sharing your gift(s) with us!
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
23rd Jun 2013 8:13pm
Hi Enchantress,
welcome to my world of writing and imagery. And thank you for your response. Wow... what a wonderful words. I expected way much more people here to combine word and imagery... is that the case?
Isn't it nice to have the ruler of the night submit on occasion for the swift ghosts of the wind?
Greetings and respect,
Ink
welcome to my world of writing and imagery. And thank you for your response. Wow... what a wonderful words. I expected way much more people here to combine word and imagery... is that the case?
Isn't it nice to have the ruler of the night submit on occasion for the swift ghosts of the wind?
Greetings and respect,
Ink
Anonymous
23rd Jun 2013 9:06pm
Love this Inkst! Wonderful spill! Xo
24th Jun 2013 6:14pm
How nice. Thank you! So fun being here with such lovely persons responding
Anonymous
- Edited 5th Jan 2019 8:45pm
24th Jun 2013 6:26am
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24th Jun 2013 6:15pm
Thank you! I just love the way the clouds flow like waves towards the moon. I was lucky to capture this
Anonymous
- Edited 23rd Oct 2019 7:38am
24th Jun 2013 6:01pm
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24th Jun 2013 6:16pm