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Emoting the rain
Fall, oh rain! why mock our pain?
suffocate and squirm with your laments
engulf this tortured earth and soothe its tantrums
we are nothing but obstacles in between
while you drift through turbulent times
we stomp and watch, anticipating your despair.
Cry for us again; we are parched
your tears, to sate; this anxious wait
seems eternal before the darkness,
the grey - saturating all light
paints your gloom; that's so like you,
still hiding the sun away.
Spying on the unaware, your amorphous eyes
glare and pinch a wail, unwelcome gale
like burst fire you thrust water; no more
at your mercy we scour your shadows
your breathless hue ignites the senses
blooming hope in defeated hearts
..and death in your wrathful art.
suffocate and squirm with your laments
engulf this tortured earth and soothe its tantrums
we are nothing but obstacles in between
while you drift through turbulent times
we stomp and watch, anticipating your despair.
Cry for us again; we are parched
your tears, to sate; this anxious wait
seems eternal before the darkness,
the grey - saturating all light
paints your gloom; that's so like you,
still hiding the sun away.
Spying on the unaware, your amorphous eyes
glare and pinch a wail, unwelcome gale
like burst fire you thrust water; no more
at your mercy we scour your shadows
your breathless hue ignites the senses
blooming hope in defeated hearts
..and death in your wrathful art.
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- Edited 16th May 2018 11:39am
18th Jun 2013 6:38pm
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re: Re: Soon mon, soon
19th Jun 2013 2:15pm
yeah i heard the link you sent... country blues really aint my thing... he's an awesome guitarist though :D
thanks for stoppin by minou!
thanks for stoppin by minou!
Re: Soon mon, soon
18th Jun 2013 7:01pm
I like the beseeching request for rain... I find the title at odds with the style of your poem, though.
Thanks for the read.
Thanks for the read.
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re: Re: Soon mon, soon
19th Jun 2013 2:18pm
yes i took that into consideration and changed it.
i found it odd too... :P
thanks for the heads up atakti.
i found it odd too... :P
thanks for the heads up atakti.
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18th Jun 2013 7:33pm
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Re: Soon mon, soon
18th Jun 2013 8:33pm
Wow :) love the wording in this piece! The poem itself is awesome! Solid ending! Well done again 13
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re: Re: Soon mon, soon
19th Jun 2013 2:21pm
many thanks nikki... the ending was a challenge cuz i thot i'll extend the poem a bit :P
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Anonymous
18th Jun 2013 11:34pm
Did someone speak me up?!
"your breathless hue ignites the senses
blooming hope in defeated hearts"<-- Wow!
Amazing piece, 13! LOVED! Xo
"your breathless hue ignites the senses
blooming hope in defeated hearts"<-- Wow!
Amazing piece, 13! LOVED! Xo
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Re: Emoting the rain
19th Jun 2013 5:57pm
Re: Emoting the rain
22nd Jun 2013 8:54am
You just rocked my world! I'll be back to read more. You have soul and eloquence.
Thank you.
<3 Honey
Thank you.
<3 Honey
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Re: Emoting the rain
23rd Jun 2013 4:54pm
Last line was beautiful. Your voice in this was outspoken and outstanding. It's a pleasure to be reading your work again.
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Re: Emoting the rain
28th Jun 2013 9:45am