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Uncomfortably Numb
Birds chirp frantically
As the sun peeks over the
Distant horizon
I listen for a brief second
To the world awakening
Before drowning it out with pain
Passionate tears slide down to my headphones
Which spit thrashing notes of agony
Every beat beckoning the release of strained sobs
The edge of my bloodstained blade
Pinches my flawed legs
But it won't let out any blood
Time passes as melodic notes of anger
Flow into my comfortably numb mind
My unsteady hand perched above my wrist
I no longer have a reason to
Slash open my skin
I no longer require one
The blade dances across my skin
My hands shake with forced excitement
The corner dips in, breaking the dry epidermis
I don't have to wait,
Blood sheds, free at last,
My body feels uncomfortably numb,
But the starved blood is free at last!
Now, Sam, read that again.
Twist every word drenched with hurt
Around in your mind.
Think about it.
Do I sound okay to you?
As the sun peeks over the
Distant horizon
I listen for a brief second
To the world awakening
Before drowning it out with pain
Passionate tears slide down to my headphones
Which spit thrashing notes of agony
Every beat beckoning the release of strained sobs
The edge of my bloodstained blade
Pinches my flawed legs
But it won't let out any blood
Time passes as melodic notes of anger
Flow into my comfortably numb mind
My unsteady hand perched above my wrist
I no longer have a reason to
Slash open my skin
I no longer require one
The blade dances across my skin
My hands shake with forced excitement
The corner dips in, breaking the dry epidermis
I don't have to wait,
Blood sheds, free at last,
My body feels uncomfortably numb,
But the starved blood is free at last!
Now, Sam, read that again.
Twist every word drenched with hurt
Around in your mind.
Think about it.
Do I sound okay to you?
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Re: Uncomfortably Numb
7th Jun 2013 11:28am
Oh shit ... it's so vivid that it makes me fear for the writer. I feel the pain through the lines and must say that this poem - although it's so sad - has so much beauty in its words.
Chi
Chi
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7th Jun 2013 9:31pm
Thank you :) the beauty isn't always able to be seen through the pain
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7th Jun 2013 9:32pm
Thank you for commenting, its nice to know that someone else can relate, scary too
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Re: Uncomfortably Numb
7th Jun 2013 12:44pm
As your poems get darker and darker your poetic technique gets better and better. The tension in the flow of words is gripping (but relieved at just the right points by softening adjectives).
Could you manage a happy poem- as a test?
Could you manage a happy poem- as a test?
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re: Re: Uncomfortably Numb
8th Jun 2013 8:12pm
Shit I like that metaphor! It just breeds hopelessness. Thanks for commenting Vortex
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29th Nov 2013 5:55am
I don't know what to say... One of the few poems I have seen that mean bore that is written :)... Nice... Hahda its hard to put a smile in my comment becuse of the peom... But still you did good
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