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8th Nov 2010 3:36am
although this is a good poem i just feel it's not on par with some of your other haikus
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8th Nov 2010 2:47pm
i mean this poem doesnt make me go wow this is amazing not like your other ones
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8th Nov 2010 6:16pm
indeed it's too long
i like your version as well is so simple as a haiku must be !
i will rewrite the ending!
thanks jack!
Its beautiful and pure like the inner soul
10th Nov 2010 5:32am
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10th Nov 2010 10:54am
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13th Nov 2010 1:06pm
i like the way its written. if anything i would omit the words "and" & "oh", but thats just me.
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