Birth of a Storm

my favourite lines
"Inside my eyes are heavy
watching the drips
drop slowly down
the slider doors
My eyelids
slide slowly
towards the floor "

A good poem on nature and how the personae relates it all to herself in the last stanza.

I just love the work especially the last stanza..

Thank you both for your kind words.My poetry, like myself, is a work in progress. I appreciate the encouragement.

it reads a bit awkward, but i keep reading and the simplicity
takes me in. when i finish i am in it, visuals, feelings...
i look at it on the page again, and it really doesn't
seem like much, but when i read it, it happens again.

a magic poem!

Wow thank you! I really have not let anyone read my work before posting it here. I really have no idea what to expect. It pleases me when other find some sort of meaning or joy from the things I write. It is a simple poem. Much of the poetry I write is. I really have a tendency to run off at the mouth/pen so in my poetry I tend to lean the other way. Saying or expressing as much as I can with as few word as possible. Sometimes it works and sometimes not. Mostly though I write for myself. I dont have some great expectation of for my writing. But if by chance even one person other than myself feels or enjoys something I have written, then I feel as if I have done well. So again thank you for the compliment on my work. I hope to get some more posted soon. Love&Peace

Simplicity requires a lot of work! Like the old saying: "She makes it look easy." Not using too many words requires skill and vicious editing. Most important is not having expectations. Expectation encourages pandering, screws up your original feeling, intent. And yeah, it doesn't work sometimes; but it's worth following you just to read when it does. (All in my not-so-humble opinion, of course :)