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States Of Mind
Insanity, normality
What difference does it make?
In this world where beauty rules
Mentality is fake
So long as you can wear a dress
And make-up suits your skin
What goes on inside your mind
Is but background din
You could have ADHD
Or you could be depressed
But as long as you look good
They don’t care about the rest
But should this really be the way?
That we couldn’t care
Who can kill and who can harm
And who does not play fair
We’re all the same, each one of us
No matter sex or race
Each one trapped within our minds
With problems we must face
What difference does it make?
In this world where beauty rules
Mentality is fake
So long as you can wear a dress
And make-up suits your skin
What goes on inside your mind
Is but background din
You could have ADHD
Or you could be depressed
But as long as you look good
They don’t care about the rest
But should this really be the way?
That we couldn’t care
Who can kill and who can harm
And who does not play fair
We’re all the same, each one of us
No matter sex or race
Each one trapped within our minds
With problems we must face
Published 10th Sep 2009
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10th Sep 2009 11:06pm
10th Sep 2009 11:07pm
realistic blende of thought & feeling .. speaking the bitter TRUTH .. well done! :)
15th Dec 2009 11:23pm
Read quite a few of your poems, this one is a particular favourite,
but the appreciation is for all the ones I read.
Rhymed verse is hard to do. (I've never practised enough to get mine to
sound natural, though I can do funny ones ok.) I'm used to seeing lots
of extra adjectives, sing-song rhythms, and... well, gooey florid gunk.
But you manage to express complex subjects with yours. Each of your words
meaning just enough. Each placed just right. Natural rhythm, the rhyme
not calling too much attention to itself. Beautiful, precise, miniatures.
Ray
22nd Dec 2009 5:15pm
Thank you, I'm glad you like my work. I appreciate your kind words, they mean a lot.
I understand where you're coming from with it not sounding or feeling right - I have the same problem with free verse.
Once again, thank you.
I understand where you're coming from with it not sounding or feeling right - I have the same problem with free verse.
Once again, thank you.
17th Sep 2011 8:08pm
The truth speaks with these words... Beauty hides everything, while we neglect how others feel.
