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Long live
Rainbows dance, ducking close, close, and then away;
mutated grass blades stand stainless steel sharp,
a thousand shades of red.
Shredded rays of moonlight limp through the window
with a spiritless final struggle of physics.
The birthplace of the paranormal:
this is where it all began,
so listen carefully.
Air secrets sulphur inside his cloak of copper wires;
electricity bearing popularity in this new age.
You aren't safe here, I told you to run
when the wind began to howl:
"Long live, long live, long live"
they were never talking to us.
So when the ashes rise and are caught upon a breath,
promise me this: Live long.
Live long, live long, live longest.
mutated grass blades stand stainless steel sharp,
a thousand shades of red.
Shredded rays of moonlight limp through the window
with a spiritless final struggle of physics.
The birthplace of the paranormal:
this is where it all began,
so listen carefully.
Air secrets sulphur inside his cloak of copper wires;
electricity bearing popularity in this new age.
You aren't safe here, I told you to run
when the wind began to howl:
"Long live, long live, long live"
they were never talking to us.
So when the ashes rise and are caught upon a breath,
promise me this: Live long.
Live long, live long, live longest.
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Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 00:09am
25th May 2013 00:53am
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Re: Long live
25th May 2013 2:09am
A deep one Scribbler, it thinks so many ways...so love Your crypts!!!
Excellent write!!!
Excellent write!!!
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Re: Long live
25th May 2013 5:37am
Beautiful flow of words- though I did get lost after the first two stanzas. But those first two are wonderful- as if Isaac Newton had been a poet.
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Re: Long live
25th May 2013 6:14am
Slightly dark, a dreamscape, what you are best at. Contrasts beautifully with the tender words in the closing.
*sigh* this one as me envious...
*sigh* this one as me envious...
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Re: Long live
Anonymous
25th May 2013 6:22am
God, you are Incredible, Scribbler!
The way you manipulate your words and mold your lines to produce unique thoughts in the reader's mind is amazing!Xo
The way you manipulate your words and mold your lines to produce unique thoughts in the reader's mind is amazing!Xo
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Anonymous
- Edited 14th May 2018 7:37pm
25th May 2013 8:54am
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Anonymous
- Edited 12th Jul 2018 3:39am
25th May 2013 11:55am
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re: Re: Long live
25th May 2013 12:57pm
You're not, it wasn't very well thought out.
It was more of a dreamscape sort of write,
mind wanderings, danger inside the unnoticed;
but no real poetic depth :)
It was more of a dreamscape sort of write,
mind wanderings, danger inside the unnoticed;
but no real poetic depth :)
Re: Long live
25th May 2013 1:01pm
As always I love it, Morag and her sidekick would be proud haha! But very well written :) xox
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Anonymous
- Edited 3rd Sep 2019 11:37pm
25th May 2013 7:38pm
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Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 9:39pm
25th May 2013 9:10pm
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25th May 2013 11:09pm
Re: Long live
27th May 2013 5:56am
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27th May 2013 6:51am
Re: Long live
7th Jun 2013 4:30pm
Outstanding use of imagery. "Shredded rays of moonlight limp through the window
with a spiritless final struggle of physics."
Love that. Great write dear :)
with a spiritless final struggle of physics."
Love that. Great write dear :)
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