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Paddy Mcgoohan
Gas lamps on the street
flickered dances of hello
waving to the people below
I had pulled back the curtain
watching drifters and grifters
wondering if I was safe
venturing the wide open
cracked was my mind my window my time
fractures of images lay in a box
shook to death like an etch a sketch
locked in freeze frame, such breaths
to walk that street...down there with
the rest...
those beats, flat noted repeats as me
runs for the safety, cries of the empty
stays with the hungry, nibbling upon
forever, sustenance however slim
grimace this and blemish cringe
for I mar the populace carve
sticking knives to the night alive
watching from above the flickering light
as rover rolls over a passerby
number six lives in envy
forever building escape
flickered dances of hello
waving to the people below
I had pulled back the curtain
watching drifters and grifters
wondering if I was safe
venturing the wide open
cracked was my mind my window my time
fractures of images lay in a box
shook to death like an etch a sketch
locked in freeze frame, such breaths
to walk that street...down there with
the rest...
those beats, flat noted repeats as me
runs for the safety, cries of the empty
stays with the hungry, nibbling upon
forever, sustenance however slim
grimace this and blemish cringe
for I mar the populace carve
sticking knives to the night alive
watching from above the flickering light
as rover rolls over a passerby
number six lives in envy
forever building escape
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too kind-Humbled by the comment-search the site many Gifted Artisans here to be sure!!!
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20th May 2013 4:49pm
those beats, flat noted repeats as me
runs for the safety, cries of the empty
stays with the hungry, nibbling upon
forever, sustenance however slim
I especially liked this bit^^
Very well written, Soul!
runs for the safety, cries of the empty
stays with the hungry, nibbling upon
forever, sustenance however slim
I especially liked this bit^^
Very well written, Soul!
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Anonymous
20th May 2013 7:33pm
You sir are amazing! I could see myself looking down at the street of drifters and grifters on deplay, by flickering gas lamp shadow light.. exposing every thing, every sound and everyone! Totally cool and vivid write, Soul! :)
"cracked was my mind my window my time"<-- that one liner jumped out for me! Xoxo
"cracked was my mind my window my time"<-- that one liner jumped out for me! Xoxo
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20th May 2013 10:49pm
You humble me with such Kindness Dear Rain-Great Poetess!!!
that was my favorite too- felt cool for a second then realized I had to finish the write lol
Thank You so much!!!
that was my favorite too- felt cool for a second then realized I had to finish the write lol
Thank You so much!!!