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Walls
Asylum-blanched paint buckle at their corners,
crinkling into many suppressed frown lines with a groan.
They clamp the four encased walls in protective layers,
walls that used to be able to talk
are gratefully silent.
A seat sits spine-straight in the ribs of the room,
an occupant slumping on the worn veteran timber.
Brutal cheek bones high and severe
with deceitfully soft lullaby eyes,
lure in curiosity.
Time seems to have paused
for dramatic effect.
He stands and the walls
fall one by one.
crinkling into many suppressed frown lines with a groan.
They clamp the four encased walls in protective layers,
walls that used to be able to talk
are gratefully silent.
A seat sits spine-straight in the ribs of the room,
an occupant slumping on the worn veteran timber.
Brutal cheek bones high and severe
with deceitfully soft lullaby eyes,
lure in curiosity.
Time seems to have paused
for dramatic effect.
He stands and the walls
fall one by one.
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Re: Walls
1st May 2013 8:30pm
Dramatic effect, yes. Excellent atmosphere established here - any more happening in this world??
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2nd May 2013 7:32pm
Re: Walls
1st May 2013 11:21pm
Anonymous
- Edited 14th May 2018 7:37pm
1st May 2013 11:49pm
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2nd May 2013 7:27pm
Re: Walls
2nd May 2013 00:34am
Spectacular imagery.
" Brutal cheek bones high and severe " Cannot Un-see .
" Brutal cheek bones high and severe " Cannot Un-see .
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Anonymous
- Edited 3rd Sep 2019 11:37pm
2nd May 2013 1:16am
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Re: Walls
Anonymous
2nd May 2013 5:58am
Wow! Your descriptive writing ability is through the roof in this ink! Totally awesome read!
Loved!Xo
Loved!Xo
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Re: Walls
2nd May 2013 6:16am
The dismal atmosphere is really neat and works well alongside the subject.
The first stanza: lovely imagery :)
Nice one Scribbler.
The first stanza: lovely imagery :)
Nice one Scribbler.
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Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 00:09am
2nd May 2013 10:23am
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Re: Walls
2nd May 2013 7:28pm
scribbs. i like your darkside alot lately lady.
i'm glad you are exploring that mam. the suits you well lady.
well done miss scribbs...
i'm glad you are exploring that mam. the suits you well lady.
well done miss scribbs...
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Re: Walls
Anonymous
- Edited 11th Jun 2019 9:40pm
4th May 2013 9:11am
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