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This is a recording of the opening poem from a chapbook about travels in Asia I recently released.
http://soundcloud.com/jackyt/travels-with-the-paperback
I was listening to some dub and just started speaking over it, captured the smiling/reminiscing tone I wanted readers to read.. ahhh but thats the joy of books, its all about the musicality the reader brings. :) New experience for a normal spoken word fella!
Customs:
We hid the movies we made on our phones as draft MMS messages so our partners wouldn’t find them.
The way we smiled in shot together was too revealing.
Your twists of lips would ever so slightly tug at my patience…
to stand up straight and leave the ICU, for good.
You went home eventually. With legs bowed and swollen,
searching for foot-holes on flat ground,
you swung about with a gait full of destination not journey.
I took my time chasing you up while you took years to come down;
we talked through lenses and microscopes till nothing was discrete.
Those who say there is no expression here, are simply illiterate to the language.
:)
http://soundcloud.com/jackyt/travels-with-the-paperback
I was listening to some dub and just started speaking over it, captured the smiling/reminiscing tone I wanted readers to read.. ahhh but thats the joy of books, its all about the musicality the reader brings. :) New experience for a normal spoken word fella!
Customs:
We hid the movies we made on our phones as draft MMS messages so our partners wouldn’t find them.
The way we smiled in shot together was too revealing.
Your twists of lips would ever so slightly tug at my patience…
to stand up straight and leave the ICU, for good.
You went home eventually. With legs bowed and swollen,
searching for foot-holes on flat ground,
you swung about with a gait full of destination not journey.
I took my time chasing you up while you took years to come down;
we talked through lenses and microscopes till nothing was discrete.
Those who say there is no expression here, are simply illiterate to the language.
:)
Published 25th Apr 2013
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25th Apr 2013 3:16am
25th Apr 2013 12:52pm
:)
Ahhh I read alot of Tom Robbins and eastern bios mainly, and read a shit ton of my peers work around melbourne.
I really should read more though!
Ahhh I read alot of Tom Robbins and eastern bios mainly, and read a shit ton of my peers work around melbourne.
I really should read more though!
25th Apr 2013 1:08pm
ah...
"Jitterbug Perfume" wasn't too bad. I was sitting here wondering last night if Gaimen would be your cup of tea, not too mention Harlan Ellison, Gaimen for his storytelling style, and Ellison for his societal undertones.
I tend to shy away from spoken word. Too many lean far into the lyrical, creating a poetical void in terms of compression (the density of language in poetry, letting one sentence create many meanings) metaphor, allusion, and such.
I do like how you seem to try to bridge that gap. And while cultural ideas interest you, your work approaches them from different perspectives (focusing on the girl to tell of her country for example)Your piece contrasting poetry with muscles, and the comedy of P.E. are two other fine examples.
Yeah... I am listening, and will continue to do so :)
"Jitterbug Perfume" wasn't too bad. I was sitting here wondering last night if Gaimen would be your cup of tea, not too mention Harlan Ellison, Gaimen for his storytelling style, and Ellison for his societal undertones.
I tend to shy away from spoken word. Too many lean far into the lyrical, creating a poetical void in terms of compression (the density of language in poetry, letting one sentence create many meanings) metaphor, allusion, and such.
I do like how you seem to try to bridge that gap. And while cultural ideas interest you, your work approaches them from different perspectives (focusing on the girl to tell of her country for example)Your piece contrasting poetry with muscles, and the comedy of P.E. are two other fine examples.
Yeah... I am listening, and will continue to do so :)
26th Apr 2013 3:50am
Maggie, I literally am flawed to have someone with such a deep understanding of poetry and an uncanny perception of myself tuning in and supporting me.
I will go get some Gaimen and Ellison and report back on what ive learned, cheers for directing me towards what can benefit me and keeping me in check with my work too!
What u have written about spoken word is so on point, I may even quote that multiple times over the next few weeks to people who may need to hear it lol
:)
I will go get some Gaimen and Ellison and report back on what ive learned, cheers for directing me towards what can benefit me and keeping me in check with my work too!
What u have written about spoken word is so on point, I may even quote that multiple times over the next few weeks to people who may need to hear it lol
:)