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Dust and thirst
I am gravel scraping myself raw,
scattershot, flung low and hard.
Your words smooth, then ravage, only
to smooth again. I am crunched underfoot
unable to cobblestone myself together.
The driveway starts here, ends there.
A short few steps — this journey does not
continue indefinitely. One day, I will rip it all up
and plant a garden. A joyous well will
keep it green, unbidden.
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re: Re: Dust and thirst
19th Apr 2013 9:28pm
No, still an angry write. "One day" makes it so...
As for the idea of gravel, that is just a way I found to physically represent the emotions - gritty, hard and brittle, all broken and breaking further.
As for the idea of gravel, that is just a way I found to physically represent the emotions - gritty, hard and brittle, all broken and breaking further.
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19th Apr 2013 9:33pm
Re: Dust and thirst
19th Apr 2013 9:46pm
*buys plot in the middle of a desert and waters the only tree he plants*
inspiration blooms in every place ;D
inspiration blooms in every place ;D
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22nd Apr 2013 8:36pm
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20th Apr 2013 7:01am
Wonderful write, Ataki.
Your words smooth, then ravage, only
to smooth again. I am crunched underfoot
unable to cobblestone myself together.
^Especially liked.
Your words smooth, then ravage, only
to smooth again. I am crunched underfoot
unable to cobblestone myself together.
^Especially liked.
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22nd Apr 2013 8:36pm
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22nd Apr 2013 8:37pm
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20th Apr 2013 11:53pm
Great capture, indeed rocky times come...keep Your direction to your garden.
A most excellent write as Always!!!
A most excellent write as Always!!!
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22nd Apr 2013 8:38pm
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13th May 2013 3:11pm
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13th May 2013 3:58pm
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re: Re: Dust and thirst
14th May 2013 3:34pm
Thanks, Aish!
I first thought "cobble".. Mr A made a similar comment.
I will reconsider, and thanks for the thoughtful feedback, appreciate it.
:)
I first thought "cobble".. Mr A made a similar comment.
I will reconsider, and thanks for the thoughtful feedback, appreciate it.
:)
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