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Dust
Coffee tables soaked up the sun-shine memories
that we left behind in our hast to move forward,
your smile as bright as the moon on a cloudless night.
Meadows of stars swayed to diverse mystical complexities
of the universe, dust settling with a shift
in fates fragile dynamics.
Darting around oblivion, succumbing to the sirens
never-ending call, you were fading with the strain
of everyday; skin paper thin, eyes holding the
weight of the world.
You departed with minimal fuss, a chasm in your wake.
The decades that followed dragged their feet,
I don't remember who I am and the nights are always
teeming with clouds that form the lump in my throat.
Frown lines etch into my skull with every waking hour,
whilst my eyes stare into the face of death with
wooden indifference.
The dust has picked up again,
for the last time.
that we left behind in our hast to move forward,
your smile as bright as the moon on a cloudless night.
Meadows of stars swayed to diverse mystical complexities
of the universe, dust settling with a shift
in fates fragile dynamics.
Darting around oblivion, succumbing to the sirens
never-ending call, you were fading with the strain
of everyday; skin paper thin, eyes holding the
weight of the world.
You departed with minimal fuss, a chasm in your wake.
The decades that followed dragged their feet,
I don't remember who I am and the nights are always
teeming with clouds that form the lump in my throat.
Frown lines etch into my skull with every waking hour,
whilst my eyes stare into the face of death with
wooden indifference.
The dust has picked up again,
for the last time.
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Re: Dust
12th Apr 2013 8:56pm
Entered in the 'A picture says a thousand words. What are they?' competition.
The picture is from:
http://cdelaire.deviantart.com/art/Sad-art-33328117
The picture is from:
http://cdelaire.deviantart.com/art/Sad-art-33328117
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12th Apr 2013 11:10pm
Re: Dust
12th Apr 2013 9:39pm
Wow Scribbler!!!
This is truly incredible, well thought out (felt out)...Very striking, strong write from first to last line!!!
Haunting Sadness!!!
This is truly incredible, well thought out (felt out)...Very striking, strong write from first to last line!!!
Haunting Sadness!!!
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re: Re: Dust
12th Apr 2013 11:11pm
Re: Dust
12th Apr 2013 10:00pm
"You departed with minimal fuss, a chasm in your wake.
The decades that followed dragged their feet,
I don't remember who I am and the nights are always
teeming with clouds that form the lump in my throat."
Strong lines, very strong. Enjoyed it. Good luck with the comp!
The decades that followed dragged their feet,
I don't remember who I am and the nights are always
teeming with clouds that form the lump in my throat."
Strong lines, very strong. Enjoyed it. Good luck with the comp!
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Thank you, Ataki; I appreciate your comments,
there are very strong contenders in the competition already,
I look forward to reading more :)
there are very strong contenders in the competition already,
I look forward to reading more :)
Re: Dust
12th Apr 2013 11:22pm
good feeling of sadness...
fav lines:
"The dust has picked up again,
for the last time. "
I hope you win that contest (:
fav lines:
"The dust has picked up again,
for the last time. "
I hope you win that contest (:
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12th Apr 2013 11:30pm
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12th Apr 2013 11:43pm
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re: Re: Dust
13th Apr 2013 9:22am
Good writers sync alike ^_^
I'm glad I could do that for you,
thank you for your wonderful comments :)
I'm glad I could do that for you,
thank you for your wonderful comments :)
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Re: Dust
Anonymous
13th Apr 2013 6:01am
"Meadows of stars swayed to various mystical complexities"
What beautiful Dust you've created!:)
Scribble you are truly wonderful with a pen!
What beautiful Dust you've created!:)
Scribble you are truly wonderful with a pen!
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13th Apr 2013 9:29am
Re: Dust
15th Apr 2013 5:58am
scribbs you have a certain flow of language that i don't think works for any other but you make it yours lady....
well done mam.
well done mam.
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